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MadManWithaBox
February 27th, 2011, 04:35 PM
Ive already uploaded this, but I'd like anther set of opinions?



She can't look at herself in the mirror.
She hates what she see's.
She wants to cut away the imperfections.
She wants to cut away the fat.
She wants to cut away her whole being.

She wants to cut out her heart,
and live without the pain.

She worries people will see.
The scars.
She thinks people will see the pain.
And nothing frightens her more.

Her whole being
She wants it to be over
She wants it to be better
She wants to be a small child again
She wants someone to pick her up
in their arms and carry her home.

But no-one comes.
The dissatisfaction sickens her.
The hatred she feels when she looks in the mirror.
The ugly wounds, disgusting reminders
of her own weakness
The exams she has to revise for
The boyfriend she has to please
Her mum shouting at her
Her sister crying in the background
It is all too much.

Too much for me.

Fiction
February 27th, 2011, 04:45 PM
Well I know I commented before... but it is very good Matt :)

YesterdaysNews
February 28th, 2011, 10:05 PM
I think this is excellent, very relatable...

Kaya
February 28th, 2011, 10:47 PM
I think this is excellent, very relatable...

^ True



I really like this, and I can also relate to this.

MadManWithaBox
March 1st, 2011, 04:48 PM
Thanks :)

gingeylover14
March 2nd, 2011, 08:25 AM
this is me

The Madness.
March 2nd, 2011, 07:49 PM
This is just lovely Lawrence.

Well actually I do like it. :)

It's great

TravM
March 2nd, 2011, 07:51 PM
:O

This is eerily nice. I give you props man.

MariettaNate1995
March 4th, 2011, 10:20 AM
Very well done!

MadManWithaBox
March 13th, 2011, 12:28 PM
Thanks people