More new poems.

[Magenta]

The Quality On Paper

Raindrops splashing above my head
on the rooftop until it fades into a stillness like the dead.
I sit in the silence, now flooded with pain,
and I am waiting until I can feel anything else again.

Suffering quietly so I do not disturb those
who force me to only speak through endless prose.
I can scream and shout only on paper
and with the emotions, my work does become greater.

Although sometimes I will wish
there was no reason for me to write like this
because while there is quality
that is not how life truly feels in reality.

Hello

Hello, are you an angel
flying down to save me?
Can you fly me up to Heaven
where things might be happy?

Hello, are you the devil
who keeps me in this Hell?
Just take me to your domain
because with my life now, you might as well.

Is There?

Is there someone I can trust to heal me?
Is there someone out there who is trustworthy?

[Charleigh]

Why are you so good. Your so fucking talented.
Can I actually steal your talent please?

[Magenta]

*sends you talent*

[Charleigh]

Hahaha yay :'D

No you are really good at poems.
You should do something with your talent Jo

[Origami]

I honestly don't like these. Personal preference I suppose.
But I do enjoy the title of the first.

[Triceratops]

First poem: The title is nice. I really liked the lines "I sit in the silence, now flooded with pain" and "I can scream and shout only on paper". However, some of your word choices do not fit the poem and kind of ruin the tone of it (e.g. splashing). I also think that some of the lines are too long and destroy the flow of the poem. Also, try not to focus on rhyming so much - rhyming couplets sound crap unless they're crafted perfectly.

Second poem: I think you have a good idea here. The only thing I didn't like is your choice of vocabulary/wording - it's too simple and makes the poem on a whole look painfully amateur. This tends to happen in the last few lines of each verse, such as "Can you fly me up to Heaven where things might be happy?" and "Because with my life now, you might as well." It just looks so basic to me. On each verse, the first lines sound good, but afterwards the rest of the verse then drifts off and goes downhill.

Third poem: This just sounds like something you would see in the Dirty Little Secrets thread.