Written by Timelord Victorious and Fiction.

[Fiction]

So yeah, me and Matt wrote this together. One of us wrote a line, and then the other, and so on. Hope you like it :)

She had been a fighter a faker,
but that didn't stop her from putting a show for those who didn't see.
For those that didn't care.
Why would they? They didn't understand.
They didn't need to understand.
Their lives were unaffected by her hoplessness, her pain,
but it was always there,
infecting her mind,
poisoning her thoughts,
scarring her skin.
Causing her blood to ooze from her body, trickling down her arms,
tainting them with its colour
draining her body of all her hate,
her pain.
Making a rare smile form on her lips, with every drop that exited her wounds.

But it wasn't enough, not anymore.
She needed more,
more blood,
more release from her nightmarish reality.
Her mind, a raging battle.
Her body, a well marked battleground.
A bloody battle fought.
It had to end,
with her minds victory, or her heart's?

She didn't want to know, she just wanted an end,
an end to the war.
The war that had taken so much out of her,
a prisoner within her own body.
Trapped in her own skin, far worse than fences or barbed wire.
Tortured, at her own hand-
and she smiled when she did it.

She was crazy,
she knew it,
but she didn't care.
Her morbid aim of self destruction was everything
nothing else mattered,
except her continuing torture of herself, mind and body.

Her war,
her game,
continuing to be fought,
But the long game was over, the end was in sight,
she took up her blade for the last time,
to make the final cut,
that would end the war,
end the game,
sap the last of her strength,
end her life.

[MadManWithaBox]

We rule :D

[Fiction]

Lol yes we do :')

[MadManWithaBox]

Plus rep for us(it would be, but I need to give more rep before giving it to you again)

[Fiction]

Lol same xD

[UnknownError]

Like it, but its sad.
Its good though. (:

I can't give you rep, need to give more to other people first. :P

[Fiction]

Lol Thanks Con, it wasn't jsut me so if you're gonna rep give some too Matt aswell :P

[UnknownError]

I did. ^_^

[MadManWithaBox]

Yeah :cool: Thanks. Its literally like, I wrote, kathy wrote a line, I wrote a line, kathy wrote a line, etc.

[Azunite]

Well as a critic,
It could have been better, like since this is a poem / song it could have included more rhymes and sentences sometimes don't follow each other.
But it is [-]kewl![/-] cool!

[Fiction]

It isn't meant to have rythem, it's meant to be more free verse type thing, but anyway that is beside the point really :P
And thanks Con.

[MadManWithaBox]

What she said. Rhyming on a piece like this, or on this subject matter even, if surprisingly hard. Its just like, saying what comes to mind, that's relevant on the subject, that makes sense, and finding it looks good. So I think anyway.

[Charleigh]

I will rep ya both ^^
Kathy ive already rep+ you for something, so I need to give more rep before giving it to you again ^^
That was good btw!

[Fiction]

haha Thanks Charlie. Just rep Matt first :P Then you can rep me again xD

[Charleigh]

haha Thanks Charlie. Just rep Matt first :P Then you can rep me again xD

I tried xDD

Will go around the forums looking for posts to rep now and will rep you when im allowed xDD

[Fiction]

haha thanks xD