The Hurt inside Me - Blade - The Poem

[districtnowhere]

Shining blade tempting me,
pain will take it far away,

deep beyond the fragile heart,
deep inside my history.

Thrusting further deep in me,
bursting out my misery.

One scratch that's all it takes,
one cut - a road inside a better place.

Blood - feeling light - at once,
the freeing tension feels me up.

The hurt inside, the blade inside me,
fills the emptiness i'm hiding.

Feel the soul is rising higher,
feel my hear in sad desire,
look an end - a brand new wire,
taking me up - higher, higher.

[The Joker]

I'll be completely honest Rok, while you aren't a bad writer, this particular topic has been covered many, many times, and most people prefer poems that can be interpreted in many ways, instead of having a direct, obvious meaning.

[districtnowhere]

well it was ment to be direct - that way it hides my life story in it.. thanks for the critic :)

[nick]

I'll be completely honest Rok, while you aren't a bad writer, this particular topic has been covered many, many times, and most people prefer poems that can be interpreted in many ways, instead of having a direct, obvious meaning.
I'm not sure that it matters, each person writing on this poem is writing for themself in a way, letting out their own emotions. Remember too that Rok is writing here in a foreign language.

[The Joker]

I'm not sure that it matters, each person writing on this poem is writing for themself in a way, letting out their own emotions. Remember too that Rok is writing here in a foreign language.

Yup, I was just trying to help him in case he was looking for some constructive criticism to improve. It wasn't a personal attack.

[Charleigh]

Its brilliant Rok (:
:hug: