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Brighter.Tomorrow
November 15th, 2010, 03:32 PM
You're Amazing.
Let's Leave It, As Simple As That.
Amazing, No Question Asked.

"Your Love, Is Amazing."
Love Goes A Long Way.
'Cause Love Will Always Be.

Your Laughter Is Amazing.
That Smiles That Brings Out The Sun?
Is Simply Amazing, No Question Asked.

Our Love, Is Amazing.
And You, Yourself,
Are Simply Amazing.

Fact
November 15th, 2010, 03:33 PM
This poem is too optimistic.
:P

Brighter.Tomorrow
November 15th, 2010, 03:50 PM
This poem is too optimistic.
:P

XD
I didn't write it for you! D=<
lol

Fact
November 15th, 2010, 04:52 PM
XD
I didn't write it for you! D=<
lol

I know, I know!
Just giving general comments ;) :D

Fiction
November 15th, 2010, 05:49 PM
No you wrote it for me Tyger :D Obviously ;P

Philleeep
November 15th, 2010, 05:52 PM
Use more writing techniques. Soap man. In a forest. ( easy was to remember techniques ) have you thought about enjamberment and caesura and rhyme scheme and how they may make the lines more efective.