the battle inside me

[welcome_to_chaos]

The Battle Inside Me :)
hope you like it


You begin whispering in my ear,
I simply say no. not tonight.
you ask again, harder this time.
no, you're not going to make me do it again.
You comand me to do it, your voice has lost it's nice smooth tone.
NO! I snap back. I will not give in. not tonight,
YES! you yell making my head pound,
we fight back and forth. back and forth.
Eventually you leave me alone,
But this battle has not been won yet,
There is peace, but i know what comes next.
You hit me with full force.
I try to resist the yelling and screaming with all my might,
But it's no use, i know i won't be able to last much longer
You continue, deturmined to break me.
My hands start to shake, then my arms, then my chest, then finnally my legs.
I cant go on much longer.
You increase in force. My head spins.
Please stop! I cry out for some relef,
But i know there's only one way out.
My hand drifts to where i keep my darling hidden. My healer. My destroyer.
I lift the razor blade towards my forarm and focus on the task ahead.
My stomach becomes nausiated but this task must be completed.
I drop the razor from my clutched fingers.
The air in my lungs rushes out, and my body colapses from the energy I've used.
Slowly, I pick up the razor from the floor and return it to its cradle on the shelf and thank God i made it another day.

[Cosmic]

It's very literal for poetry, if indeed it is a poem. It's evident that this is something very personal to you and I shan't criticise it too much, but I do think you need to start looking into different ways of expressing ideas and emotions, ones that people can relate to. This is almost too personal to properly digest as a reader, and by bringing in metaphors and similes you can make your message clear and also make the reader appreciate your language.

Paint a picture with words.

[welcome_to_chaos]

I wasnt really writing this for other. mostly for myself to try and make sence of what was going on. it indeed was ment to be personal which is why i was hesatant to post it but i did anyways.