Dark Poems

[Unwanted_Different]

This is a thread for what ever you write dark poems, lyrical poems anything to do with poems/songs.

here's mine

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the pain is unreal as I take another pill
another drop hits the floor
and relif has shut the door
I have tried with all my might
and cried endless rivers of tears
I have died in spirit and in soul
and finalynow as a whole

Hero
I need a hero to save me from this life
I need a hero to save me from my lies
I need a hero to show me im alright
I need a hero who will take away my knife

Crimson
A drop of crimson falls from my blade as i cry one last time
I say what i have yet again and again
but this time it truly is the
end

Eyes
I dry my eyes and look up from my lies
i slowly dieand i jsut will not try
why must cry
my fears bind me ight
i slowldie
i just will nto cry

Too Young
This all ends in a tie
around a young eck
her broken spirit wil fly

HATE
I hte that you'll never hear
I hate that I can't see you
I hate that I can't be with you
I hat that I miss you
I hate that I still hear you
I hate that I can necer forget you
I hate that I can still feel your prescece here
I hate that I still cry
I hate that you DIED

[Aspiringanonymous]

Cutting and Self Harm :arrow: The Open Book

[deadpie]

Not trying to be rude or anything, but could you remember to use spell check?

[allsoulsareblack]

i lay alone in bed on the night i pull out my razor in this dull light i dont cry i dont moan im just glad im alone this sorrow this pain i feel insane i do that self blame i feel crimzon on my knife as i take the last breath of life SORRY I NO ITS A SHIT RHYM BUT I CAINT SLEEP SO TELL ME WAT U THINK

[The Joker]

Please seperate it into stanzas.

[deadpie]

i lay alone in bed on the night i pull out my razor in this dull light i dont cry i dont moan im just glad im alone this sorrow this pain i feel insane i do that self blame i feel crimzon on my knife as i take the last breath of life SORRY I NO ITS A SHIT RHYM BUT I CAINT SLEEP SO TELL ME WAT U THINK

I've read this before at least a hundred times in the poetry sections. Try to change it up. Try not to make your poems sound like everyone else and don't use boring words like "Insane, blame, cry, alone...". You need to make stronger words to impact people.

[ShatteredWings]

and don't use boring words like "Insane, blame, cry, alone...".

Not relevant to example above, but would replacements be more like "psychotic, accuse, isolated" (can't think of a good one for cry that isn't in french)

[deadpie]

Not relevant to example above, but would replacements be more like "psychotic, accuse, isolated" (can't think of a good one for cry that isn't in french)

Cry = Whimper or Sob

Isolated is still kind of weak imo.

[ShatteredWings]

Right. Duh. My mind was stuck on "pleurer" for some reason (yes. what the fuck indeed).
other synonyms with alone/isolated are more metaphors imo. Boxed, cut off (?)