Carnage / Gehinom

[deadpie]

Drags between cigarettes and phantasm silhouttes
She's pissing on a peasent and rippling out a brunette
Coiled arms and and fish hooks to the chest
Tarnish shit all over my hands, your legs, her breasts
Getting off to the cataclysm
Dedicating my joy to the exploding aneurysm

Bite down on that pin
Watch your head explode from afar
Backfloating in a pool of organs
The radiance in the sheol is the humane bizarre

All the muscles used and sore
With the bodies nailed to the floor
Return to the scene and keep the evidence clean
Tomorrow is another quinetessential havoc mien

[Dorsum Oppel]

One of your best. It has excellent flow and pace, I like it much better than the nonrhythmic free verse.

[Sunshine Girl]

quinetessential is one of my vocab words. :P

Anyways, the description is brilliant. Morbid and has a sort of rhythm as said above.