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The Joker
August 17th, 2010, 03:14 AM
OK, so I wrote this out of a personal experience. This is the very first draft. Since the lyrics are very personal to me, try to at least provide some sort of in depth criticism, rather than "iT sUkS!!!323". It's a poem-ish song, I guess these are just verses, I didn't feel like doing a chorus or a bridge at the moment.


Fragile minds meet fragile times
Words stated that remind
Of a broken home, a broken place
But the reward should not be a broken face

Am I destined to be the champ crying in the corner?
The shut up, no one cares, is this the order?

Babies spoon fed do not digest
Yeah, I'm glad to get that off my chest

Wearing a disguise
To hide your mother fucking lies
You were bullied, you were harassed
All the while I was sitting in an hourglass
Trapped in time
When will it be mine...mine to shine

And it's a long ass road to recovery
Just hope I dismiss the lack of dignity