I know this poem sucks.

[Kaya]

I am breaking. Rusted down from thirteen years of pain.
I hurt myself so I can have just a couple minutes of freedom.
I do what Im told, never argue.
Go on, say you hate me. Tell me Im worthless.
I know this is true. Always has been.
My life is tough. Ive only said that once.
Its time to let it out. Pointless words spoken.
No one is coming to save me. My white horse died.
Whats the point to go on? Ill die eventually anyway.
Ill die eventually.





Feedback apprieciated***I know this sucks. I literally just threw down whatever popped into my head. Feel free to say it's bad.

[Aspiringanonymous]

I won't criticize you, I know that it was an impromptu stream of consciousness and not a formal piece to be reasonably critiqued. I hope it helped to write this. :) :hug3:

[misery_business]

I like it :) I can totally relate to it !

[Lights]

I won't criticize you, I know that it was an impromptu stream of consciousness and not a formal piece to be reasonably critiqued. I hope it helped to write this. :) :hug3:

Yeah, I agree with this. Just as an extra tip for next time, try and improve your punctuation. ;)

[Kaya]

thanks

[Sith Lord 13]

I personally like stream of consciousness stuff like this. I really like this piece, well done.

[Blood]

I like this Kayla.

[starrburst]

I think it is very good, don't put yourself down so much!

[Kaya]

Blah. lolz. if you guys say so. Thanks