Haven
May 6th, 2010, 08:22 PM
I was wondering if I could get some opinions on a really, really rough outline of what a project I'm going to start soon. I'm not used to writing long pieces of work, the longest thing I've really ever written was two pages single-spaced in word. But hey! :D Time to get a move on with something a bit longer and more in-depth. I have a lot that I plan on doing with this, and it probably seems a tad bit boring below. :/ but ah well. Anyone care to give me any thoughts?
"I once uttered those three, life-altering words to you. I once held them so dearly close to me, with every inch of my body. It was true that at that given moment I loved you, but as time passed the feelings began to fade. The life, those feelings, the gentle, loving feel you used to give me evaporated with each passing day. If I wanted to lie to you, I could say that it's not you and that it is me. Like everything, it could all be my fault. One thing we promised each other was that we would never lie. We would keep our trust true to one another, but I'll tell you.. over the course of the last few weeks, everything we once had has disappeared into a nothingness. An abyss of darkness. I will never fully understand what changed, but I can ensure that nothing comes out of what has happened. What was once love, has now turned into a frightened, hollow broken heart. You were mine, we were in love. What happened?"
"I once uttered those three, life-altering words to you. I once held them so dearly close to me, with every inch of my body. It was true that at that given moment I loved you, but as time passed the feelings began to fade. The life, those feelings, the gentle, loving feel you used to give me evaporated with each passing day. If I wanted to lie to you, I could say that it's not you and that it is me. Like everything, it could all be my fault. One thing we promised each other was that we would never lie. We would keep our trust true to one another, but I'll tell you.. over the course of the last few weeks, everything we once had has disappeared into a nothingness. An abyss of darkness. I will never fully understand what changed, but I can ensure that nothing comes out of what has happened. What was once love, has now turned into a frightened, hollow broken heart. You were mine, we were in love. What happened?"