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rubyred91
April 13th, 2010, 03:30 PM
This is my first song iv wrote its really rubbish i struggled with the chorus but here goes.

JENNY'S SONG

She's all alone,
Nowhere to turn,
Every road leads to a dead end,
She builds her heart out of blood,
Even though she promised she never would,
With every cut,
With every blade,
Her feelings die away,
And she promises herself everytimes the last time.

[chorus]
But the feelings are too deep,
The cuts are to weak,
The pain is too strong,
The relief is long,
She wants to bleed,
Bleed her thoughts away,
She wants to bleed.

As the rose petals fall,
The wounds grow,
she just wants to forget it all,
She's so numb,
The pain so deep,
As she cuts her thoughts start to weep,
She feels at ease,
She feels sane,
And she promises herself everytimes the last time.

{chorus]


sooo yerrrr bit shit butt want to know what you think. x

Amyxoxo
April 13th, 2010, 03:59 PM
I have some chords for this song I wondered if you had thought up a melody?
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It is a very nice song, you are very talented. If you have any more songs I'm always looking for a lyricist not many good ones about!
PM me with anything else :) xx

Obscene Eyedeas
April 13th, 2010, 04:09 PM
moved to --> the open book

rubyred91
April 13th, 2010, 05:02 PM
thanks:)
i haven't thought up a melody i dont play any instruments so dont know anything about that haha
xx

Asylum
April 14th, 2010, 11:40 AM
this is awesome

Obscene Eyedeas
April 14th, 2010, 11:49 AM
I really like this song Hun. keep writing you're really good at it

misery_business
April 14th, 2010, 02:01 PM
very nice, so emotional :) well done your really good !

HeroesAndCons
April 17th, 2010, 11:18 PM
i was wondering if my band can maby play it