to somebody...

[DouggyO.o]

i dont know why i cant get uout of my head
i even think of u when i lie in bed
there is somthing about u that makes me want to jump with glee
even tho u reject me
your the funnyest, sweetest , most butiful girl i will ever see
so please just try and like me...

sorry i didnt revise it

[Charlotte]

Nor do you revise anything that you post.

The poem is okay. There's no "wow" about it. I think you rushed to post this and with the format and spelling you really didn't put any effort into it.

[Parasite]

don't lie to him.
it was cliche, boring, and horrid.

[saucysister]

Why even bother posting this when you dont even fully type out "you"? Nothng but laziness. A poem should be formatted correctly.

[kolte]

My fucking god, if you read the poem, regardless of how well written it was, (I dont' see you fucking scolars dishing out art) he is having a troubled relationship.
maybe he needs to talk.
perhaps this is a cry for help.
you can still feel the pain in the literature.
isnt that all that is needed to pull an audience.
you all felt compelled to write somthing.
even if it was arrogent.
uncalled for.
harmful critisism.
rash.
you all disgust me.

[Parasite]

This is the CREATIVE writing forum, not the go cut yourself and cry forum.
That is another portion of this website. :)

[kolte]

This is the CREATIVE writing forum, not the go cut yourself and cry forum.
That is another portion of this website. :)

as far as i'm aware austin, your the only one between us who cuts themselves and cries.
I'm not that much of a pussy.

[Kiros]

Whoah, whoah... Settle down people... Austin, your discrimanatory remarks were completely uncalled for. They held no purpose but to make Doug fall into despair. And saucysister's comments were not acceptable either... It's amazing you two do not already have negative reputations...

And Kolte, it will be ok :)
I'm just gonna lock this now so the forum can move along...

[LOCKED]