rip that fucking slut:

[haibekah]

swallow your confidence in the form of cum
cause no one said you were pretty
no one said you were worth it
with your legs pointed to heaven
do you feel needed now?
you're hollow,
empty to the bone
you may crawl into their beds,
but never their hearts
they're gonna tear at your flesh,
fuck you to the grave,
dig a ditch
and bury you, bitch.




[if it's too.. rude? i'm sorry. just leme know.]

[Sapphire]

Ok. That was...angry...bitter...cold...

[deadpie]

It's fucking beautiful. Poetry is such a great way to piss anger out of ones body.

[nick]

wow, steps back, stunned

[haibekah]

thank-you, thank-you. ;D

[Mental]

swallow your confidence in the form of cum
cause no one said you were pretty
no one said you were worth it
with your legs pointed to heaven
do you feel needed now?
you're hollow,
empty to the bone
you may crawl into their beds,
but never their hearts
they're gonna tear at your flesh,
fuck you to the grave,
dig a ditch
and bury you, bitch.




[if it's too.. rude? i'm sorry. just leme know.]
That's very strong, and I quite like it. I'd be offended if I were a girl and that was dedicated to me, though. Is it dedicated to anyone?

[Sapphire]

You portray the cold angry, bitterness well and in a powerful way. The reader is definitely left with a lasting impression.

But, to be honest, I'm not sure I like the message/view/feeling this portrays...

[Appleton]

wow.
thats like really a cold brutal picture.
just kinda makes me stop

[MysticalBurrito]

That's...Very good, I think the above posts say what I was going to.

[haibekah]

That's very strong, and I quite like it. I'd be offended if I were a girl and that was dedicated to me, though. Is it dedicated to anyone?


i'm pretty sure there's someone i'd like to say it too, but i don't have the heart.


wow.
thats like really a cold brutal picture.
just kinda makes me stop


i like brutal. it gets the idea across. :]

[ibanezjoey1007]

This reminds me of some of the poems Ani DiFranco recorded on her early albums. Spoke reapidly, harrowing images, angry emotions. I like this. You clearly just let the pen scribble out your rage. =]