Undizzied Circles Paths

[SlightlySane]

Forever I’ll walk in a circle again
That only leads the beginning
Straight back to the end
I’ll look forever never finding

I’ll stop and look away
As the path veers today
But those separate changes
Aren’t worth these pages

Another circle now,
Again I will go
I’m not dizzy yet
How long it lasts?
I do not know

Watch me as you pass my hopes
Walk with me till you give in
It will always end in a show
Of how the heart stills grows

Faster I walk
Again in my path
My steps now wear
The ground will tear

So leave me be and let me walk
Don’t approach I won’t talk
I’ve drowned out my own
One more turn until you disown

I’ll keep walking in my circle forever
For you see I won’t get dizzy, ever
I’m used to the feeling of spinning around
At least I don’t fall, I don’t touch the ground

[Aspiringanonymous]

But those separate changes
Aren’t worth this pages (singular or plural?)

My steps now ware (wear?)
The ground will tear

So leave me be and let me walk
Don’t approach I won’t talk
I’ve have drowned out my own
One more turn until you disown

- Drowned out what? Disown what? It's unclear, and seems to be fragmented statements. Perhaps there is a better way to express whatever you were trying to say there.

Other than that, I believe that you have touched on some very thought-provoking ideas.

"At least I don’t fall, I don’t touch the ground"

[SlightlySane]

Yes I see that there were a couple typos (I was pretty upset when writting this), but what you may see from many of my poems is that I am never specific, not all of them have one message. I appreciate the constructive criticism but this is in fact poetry where there are not as many rules and a million times the expression.

Also those were fragments on purpose; a poem doesn't need to be completely specific to everyone else but the one who knows its meaning.

I really am honest when I say I appreciate your help.

[Affliction]

ryne i liked it, i dont care about the typos good job :)

[SlightlySane]

Thank you :) Very much appreciated

[deadpie]

"My steps now wear
The ground will tear

So leave me be and let me walk
Don’t approach I won’t talk"

I like those the best. I can relate, i don't talk at all when i get home from school. I'm a silent person.