tell me what you think...

[Krazymitch]

this is just something i wrote, i dont think its that good, tell me what YOU think of it..

You Are My Darling

You are my darling
With the world at your feet
What will you become
Who will you defeat

You are my darling
Growing older and wiser
What do you dream of
Who do you love

You are my darling
Bitter but sweet
You are my world
Through success, and defeat

You are my darling
You are my son
You’ll stay in my heart
Until I am done


tell me truthfully what you think

[Atonement]

I think its quite beautiful. There is little forward moving thought though. Its sweet, just its one thought and it doesn't have much of a finish. This may be because its so short.

[Krazymitch]

thanx. :D