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EverlostPoet
October 18th, 2009, 04:04 PM
A note I wrote for my love. anyway I can improve?

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7 months ago, a wonderful girl told me she loves me more than a friend… “Love; To want the best for someone, no matter what." But that's not what I'm thinking of. I'm thinking more,” is what she told me. Astounded, I fell into shock. “Wait, this girl, who I’ve had a crush on, sees me as more than a friend?!” ran through my mind. You see, even though my name means “Trash” I never had experienced the full meaning of my name. I had lots of girl friends, and even sisters, but… still.. Still a bit in shock, I eagerly answered back by telling I, too, love her. A little reluctant at first, because of being long distance, the wonderful girl accepted the role of my girlfriend…

Now, it’s October 15, 2009… And that role of girlfriend is more than just that. Both parties are crazy in love with one another. I never would have dreamed of such a thing happening to me. I had crushes in previous years, but this girl was more... I waited for someone who was different from the rest, and dang… she’s more than worth the wait!

Though we've known each other for almost a year now, it's through the past seven months, we both have really grown. It’s been filled with laughter, joy, curiosity, and even sorrow. Supporting and praying for one another through harsh times in both of our lives. God blessed me greatly with her.(Even that one time at Camp..) Now, don’t get me wrong, our relationship has been far from perfect. We’ve endured many rough patches… But we’re still together again despite that. As I always have told her, “What doesn’t break us, makes us stronger.” It’s when a couple can go through these trials, that it shows what is fake and what is true… Our love is true.(and yet people still try to bring us apart.)

What started out as an innocent friendship because of our faith—has turned into something greater. Through our many hours of honest, heart-to-heart talks we’ve come to realize that we are very similar. We can relate to one another in a way that no one else can. “Perfect for one another” is what we’ve been told. And I agree. Helping one another improve not only emotionally, but spiritually, God has continued to bless our relationship.

“You’ll never know how much I love you…” she whispers in my ear. I smile, because I know that’s true… But I smile because I also know thats he will never know just how much I love her back. Though we both know that we have still a long ways to go, there is something we’ve both agreed on… As long as God wills it, we want to be together forever…and even longer. We’ve even talked about the future, but we both know not to rush into things… However, I cannot picture myself with anyone else. I want no one else.

Some may call me pathetic, some may say it’s just ‘puppy love’ but I know deep in my heart that it’s more than that. Most of all, I’ve fallen deeply, madly, crazy in love with her… This amazing, wonderful, caring, understanding, funny, thoughtful, romantic, Beautiful, preppy, lovable, loving, Christian girl… She is the love of my life. (And I've been told not to be tied down to one girl, but.. Maybe I like it..?)


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Art_dude
October 18th, 2009, 06:21 PM
A note I wrote for my love. anyway I can improve?

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7 months ago, a wonderful girl told me she loves me more than a friend… “Love; To want the best for someone, no matter what." But that's not what I'm thinking of. I'm thinking more,” is what she told me. Astounded, I fell into shock. “Wait, this girl, who I’ve had a crush on, sees me as more than a friend?!” You see, even though my name means “Trash” I never had experienced the full meaning of my name. I had lots of girl friends, and even sisters, but… still.. Still a bit in shock, I eagerly answered back by telling her I Love her. Reluctant at first, because of the distance apart, this wonderful girl still decided to enter into a relationship.

Now, it’s October 15, 2009… And that role of girlfriend is more than just that. Both parties are crazy in love with one another. I never would have dreamed of such a thing happening to me. I've had crushes in previous years, but this girl was more... I waited for someone who was different from the rest, and she was truly worth the wait!

Though we've known each other for almost a year now, it's through the past seven months, that we've both really grown. It’s been filled with laughter, joy, curiosity, and even sorrow. We've supported and prayed for one another through harsh times in our lives. God blessed me greatly with her.(Even that one time at Camp..) Now, don’t get me wrong, our relationship has been far from perfect. We’ve endured many rough patches… But we’re still together despite them. As I always have told her, “What doesn’t break us, makes us stronger.” It’s when a couple can go through these trials, that it shows what is fake and what is true… Our love is true.

What started out as an innocent friendship because of our faith—has turned into something greater. Through our many hours of honest, heart-to-heart talks we’ve come to realize that we are very similar. We can relate to one another in a way that no one else can. “Perfect for one another” is what we’ve been told. And I agree. Helping one another improve not only emotionally, but spiritually, God has continued to bless our relationship.

“You’ll never know how much I love you…” she whispers in my ear. I smile, because I know that’s true… But I smile because I also know thats I will never know just how much I love her back. Though we both know that we still have a long way to go, there is something we’ve both agreed on… As long as God wills it, we want to be together forever…and even longer. We’ve even talked about the future, but we both know not to rush into things… However, I cannot picture myself with anyone else. I want no one else.

Some may call me pathetic, some may say it’s just ‘puppy love’ but I know deep in my heart that it’s more than that. Most of all, I’ve fallen deeply, madly, crazy in love with her… This amazing, wonderful, caring, understanding, funny, thoughtful, romantic, Beautiful, preppy, lovable, loving, Christian girl… She is the love of my life.


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Comments?

Hey there - This was one of the sweetest things I've ever read. You'd be an idiot not to give this to her. I would suggest reading it to her on your anniversary or something (very romantic) I think that at times you were redundant during the piece, but I only tightened a few things up (as shown above) and fixed a few grammatical mistakes. You drift in and out of different first person and second person perspectives: try chosing one because it's confusing. Other than that, the content is there, and it's a beautiful expression of your feelings. You two kids take care of eachother now: hear? =D

Hatsune Miku
October 18th, 2009, 09:17 PM
Excuse me if i sound corny here, but. That was beautiful. From me reading this, it shows you're affection for her. And that you'll love her forever. You should definitely give this to her. But not out of the blue. Give it to her on a special occasion, Like an anniversary (Like art_dude said) Just fix some grammar errors.
Bottom line is, Show her this!

EverlostPoet
October 19th, 2009, 07:51 PM
Thanks guys, I was planning on it and im 18 btw lol. that note makes me feel so young.

Fiending_the_freedom
October 19th, 2009, 10:32 PM
the only thing i would add is that the first half feels like your writting it for yourself, write the whole thing TO her not for her to read.

unknown2011
October 19th, 2009, 10:40 PM
sounds like my best friend and how he feels for his girl...he whispers sweet somethings into her ear all day long....give this to her dude. it's special.

Mikey
October 21st, 2009, 06:56 PM
Its very cute. Me and my ex girlfriend write each other letters weekly. What we decided is since we go to different schools and dislike making the other buy gifts we will write letters. Like i wrote her one about my day and another i wrote about how much i love her but halfway through i doodled a picture of us and wrote on the back "Prom <3?" even though we are sophomores and she giggled and blushed and it was adorable.

But its a really cute letter. My ex girlfriend and i are getting back together soon anyway.

Kahn
October 21st, 2009, 07:08 PM
One of the most caring and sweetest things I have ever read.

Suicune
October 25th, 2009, 05:38 PM
Beautiful. Plain and simple. :)

Maxxy
October 27th, 2009, 03:23 AM
That is so beautiful and nice. It's the most wonderful thing I've read and sometimes I want what has been written there, true love. She'll be a very happy girl

EverlostPoet
November 1st, 2009, 01:53 PM
If only she hadnt have dumped me. we might get back together though. :D

Nelson
December 29th, 2009, 12:23 PM
That is so sweet, how could a chick dump you with words like that.

EverlostPoet
December 29th, 2009, 04:07 PM
yea.. This girl that it was about, Cheated on me with 3 guys.. Three of my best friends. :/

Erick
December 29th, 2009, 05:56 PM
Its so nice :)
It seems you are a great guy...

EverlostPoet
December 29th, 2009, 06:16 PM
Its so nice :)
It seems you are a great guy...

Your not the first to say that. Thanks