MysticalBurrito
October 4th, 2009, 02:52 PM
I wrote a story that was poorly made a couple months ago and I've started to write another one here's the beginning.
Detective Skippy 2
Detective Skippy had just started his 5th year as a detective when the case of a missing human would change his life. "Sir, Mrs. Smith is here to see you." His Secretary told him over the intercom. "Tell her to come into my office." Mrs. Smith AKA Nancy's mother, The Bedbugs had changed their last name so their daughter wouldn't be able to find them once she got out of prison (if ever). "Hello Skippy," Mrs. Smith started. Skippy notices that she's been crying. "What wrong Ma'am?" He helps her to a nearby chair in his office. "My husband, he left on a trip to help devolope a new viruse and he didn't come back." Another tear slides down her face and onto her lacy blue blouse. Skippy offers her a tissue and she gratefully takes it. "Have you told anyone else about this?" He asks her. "No, I didn't want to put his life in danger is it had anything to do with the goverment." She pauses waiting for him to answer. "I'll do the best I can to help you find your husband." Skippy tells Mrs. Smith. She thanks him and leaves his office to pick her other daughter up from school.
About a hour later Skippy heads home with his mind in a blur. Is Nancy back? If she is would I be able to catch her again? He unlocks his front door and notices a weird noise in the rose bushes. Must be those dumb roaches again. He thinks as he walks inside his house. Skippy sets his keys and wallet on the table. He thinks about one of his cases and takes a nap. A half a hour later he wakes up when he hears a loud crash in his bedroom. He gets up to go see what the noise was when he hears someone behind him. "Why hello there Detective Skippy." The oh so familar voice sends shivers down his spine. "Nancy." his eyes widen as he turns around. "How? You? I thought we put you away for life!" She steps out of the shadow. "That's what you and everyone else thought." She walks closer to him and he backs away. "Awh what's the matter?" She looks at him with fake worry. "Scared?" Skippy looks at her shocked "Of you? No? Of what you did to me last time yes."
Detective Skippy 2
Detective Skippy had just started his 5th year as a detective when the case of a missing human would change his life. "Sir, Mrs. Smith is here to see you." His Secretary told him over the intercom. "Tell her to come into my office." Mrs. Smith AKA Nancy's mother, The Bedbugs had changed their last name so their daughter wouldn't be able to find them once she got out of prison (if ever). "Hello Skippy," Mrs. Smith started. Skippy notices that she's been crying. "What wrong Ma'am?" He helps her to a nearby chair in his office. "My husband, he left on a trip to help devolope a new viruse and he didn't come back." Another tear slides down her face and onto her lacy blue blouse. Skippy offers her a tissue and she gratefully takes it. "Have you told anyone else about this?" He asks her. "No, I didn't want to put his life in danger is it had anything to do with the goverment." She pauses waiting for him to answer. "I'll do the best I can to help you find your husband." Skippy tells Mrs. Smith. She thanks him and leaves his office to pick her other daughter up from school.
About a hour later Skippy heads home with his mind in a blur. Is Nancy back? If she is would I be able to catch her again? He unlocks his front door and notices a weird noise in the rose bushes. Must be those dumb roaches again. He thinks as he walks inside his house. Skippy sets his keys and wallet on the table. He thinks about one of his cases and takes a nap. A half a hour later he wakes up when he hears a loud crash in his bedroom. He gets up to go see what the noise was when he hears someone behind him. "Why hello there Detective Skippy." The oh so familar voice sends shivers down his spine. "Nancy." his eyes widen as he turns around. "How? You? I thought we put you away for life!" She steps out of the shadow. "That's what you and everyone else thought." She walks closer to him and he backs away. "Awh what's the matter?" She looks at him with fake worry. "Scared?" Skippy looks at her shocked "Of you? No? Of what you did to me last time yes."