I'm Here

[ErykaInspire.]

We know how you feel
We know what you see
We know what it's like
and how it must be

You feel unwanted
as if nobody cares
you feel invisible
although everyone stares

You walk alone
With tears in your eyes
but you are loved
You just need to realize

We are the ones
That're destined to meet
I'll help you up
and keep you on your feet

At times you'll get tired
and may want to let go
I'll hold onto you
I'm here you know.

[TigerLily]

Another beautiful poem Eryka, seriously, how did you get so good? :P :)

[Origami]

Reminds me of One X by Three Days Grace? o.O

[Ripplemagne]

I like how you color coordinated each stanza. It tricks the mind into thinking the poem is shorter than it actually is and can make people more willing to read it.

In terms of diction and visualization, there's not a whole lot to be found there. I'd say this is the exact opposite of the comment I left on Jessi's poem. It has purpose and climaxes at such, but there isn't a whole lot of originality like Jessi's had the nightingale, which is something you hear very seldom in everyday life. You had all really basic words, which can detract to some degree.

That being said, I got where you were going and I can see that it was more of an emotional thing that you just sat down and wrote. Overall, not bad.

[ErykaInspire.]

I did just sit down and write it, lmao

[Ripplemagne]

Mmhm. That's why I wasn't so critical on it. :P

[BuryYourFlame]

^_^

enough said :P