You left me hanging

[ErykaInspire.]

A poem I made that i've been thinking about turning into a song. Tell me what you think?

Im standing in the door
as I watch you walk away
im searching my mind;
got nothing to say

I gave you my heart
and you didnt care
you had someone else
how is this fair?

You left me hanging
on the side of the road
you didnt care
if I made it home

I swore to you
how I felt;
you make my knees weak
and my heart melt

you smiled at me
and shook your head no
you turned away
and I watched you go


Im kicking myself
and tripping on you
Im walking away
but chasing you

I cant believe
that I fell so fast
I knew that you
wernt going to last

you left me hanging
on the side of the road
you didnt care
if I made it home

My dreams are wrapped
around the things that you do
I cant sleep at night
I have nightmares of you

Im holding a gun
to the side of my head
what would you think
if you saw me dead

With a rope around my neck
and a tear in my eye
Just one step over the edge
come watch my die

I have it set up
on the side of the street
the very same spot
that fate had us meet

Now im hanging
on the side of the road
I never did
make it home..

[Jules]

I like it, even though it's sad this happens a lot in the world. Something about the syllable count is off I think. It's a good start though. I wanna hear the song whenever you decide to record it. ;D

[BuryYourFlame]

well...i noticed you didn't say anything about music on your profile...so that's makin me think you aren't gonna record it yourself...so...i am gonna offer to do a recording for you...to see what it sounds like :P (i might need a basic outline of how you want it though...lol)

[TigerLily]

well...i noticed you didn't say anything about music on your profile...so that's makin me think you aren't gonna record it yourself...so...i am gonna offer to do a recording for you...to see what it sounds like :P (i might need a basic outline of how you want it though...lol)

Yes! I wanna hear the recording!
Plus, awesome lyrics/poem Eryka :)

[ErykaInspire.]

I'd love it if you recorded it. I don't really have a base outline, so just have fun with it. Mess around, idc :P
I'm not picky.
And thank you Nerja<3

[BuryYourFlame]

ok...messing around...hm...electric or acoustic? that one is pretty important...i could do one for both i guess...yeh...i think ill do that :P

[ErykaInspire.]

lol, alrighty. You do that xP <3

[BuryYourFlame]

hehe, electric would be easier...recording wise...but acoustic would be easier writing wise X3

[alphabeta]

i like this micki. :) you should seriously become a poet or inspirational writer!

[ErykaInspire.]

I am a poet :P
I'm published.
and I plan on going to college.. not for inspirational writing.. but for Speech Pathology.. to help communication-disabled people learn to communicate in any way they can. So hopefully they can inspire someone else..

Or i'm going for Phsycology to become a childrens lawyer or social worker. Give the beaten a new life.

[BuryYourFlame]

well, it is going well, i have the main chords that i think i am gonna use, and the chorus worked out :)

[ErykaInspire.]

Yay! :D
thank you soo much<3

[BuryYourFlame]

im finished xD im at school now, and i is in music...and i finished it :P

but...it might be a bit longer before an actual recording is made, b/c the only microphones i have are real shitaaay

edit: i just remembered that the school has recording equipment that i can use :) and they also have a steel string guitar and mics :) so i might be able to get a recording up in a few days :)

[inlove]

Beautiful!! you have talent, its amazing as to how relevant it is.. it makes so much sensce i love it!! it would probably make a good song [email protected]!