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TigerLily
May 9th, 2009, 04:47 AM
So this is a poem I stumbled across in an old notebook, written a while back ago. I'm not sure if I like it or not yet, but it sorta has a personal meaning to me. So anyways, feel free to comment but dont be too evil (jks), I'm no poet :P


Porcelain Scars

Baby don’t cry…
As the salty rivers pour down her cheek, one after another in silent succession
Alone, in the dark, each tear another piece of her poor heart breaking
Baby don’t be scared…
As every part of her fragile, fragmented soul wants to run away, to somewhere but nowhere
To somebody…
Yet there is nobody.
No one to hold her little hand
Nor wipe away her tears
Nor tell her everything is going to be ok
Deserted.
Terrified.
Alone.

The crack in the china doll,
Not noticeable from afar, yet it is still
Broken.
Can it be repaired, or will this china doll be cast aside?
A faulty doll, a faulty child…
Too much damage to make it worthwhile for somebody -- anybody -- to take their time
To fix her

Baby be brave…
It won’t always be this way, I promise,
You’re doing amazing sweet pea
Baby be strong…
Though you have the weight of the world on your delicate shoulders; too young, too weak to take the strain,
Yet you can do this I know, only a matter of time
Baby hold on…
Maybe someday you won’t always have to be alone
Somebody to hold your hand.
Someday everything might just really be ok.
But for now, wipe away your own tears
And fight another day
And never, ever give up hope, nor forget the courage you have so much of inside,
Nor the strength beyond your years.
Remember always how much I love you.

This china doll can be restored,
Only the faintest of scars left on the delicate porcelain, I swear…
You will be just fine, I promise you
You can trust me, if no one else.
I look into your familiar blue eyes…
I see your pain,
I recognise your fear,
I know your heartbreak,
Just as I do my own.
And I know your scars and your battle wounds like the back of your hand…
Or should that be the back of my hand?
A shocking resemblance.
One and the same.

Underground_Network
May 9th, 2009, 07:09 AM
I love it Rachel. :)

Very powerful.

TigerLily
May 9th, 2009, 07:30 AM
^^ Thankyou :)

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 06:10 PM
Your writing is good, and has song potential.
Keep it up(:

TigerLily
May 9th, 2009, 06:24 PM
Thanks Micki, I never really write songs but that could be really interesting for a change :)

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 06:33 PM
I'd definitely encourage it :D
+Rep

TigerLily
May 9th, 2009, 06:52 PM
Thankyou, I love your poems too :)

EverlostPoet
May 9th, 2009, 06:55 PM
i love your poetry keep it up, i havent posted any of mine on here yet but i plan on it sooner or later.

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 06:58 PM
Thankyou, I love your poems too :)

Thank you very much :D
I actually have over 60poems.. I need to find the time to post them xP
One of my poems is currently getting published. I'm excited :D

TigerLily
May 9th, 2009, 07:01 PM
Ooh, that sounds really exciting Micki, good for you! :D
And thanks Jake, I'll look forward to reading some of yours, sooner or later :)

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 07:04 PM
Thank you(:

Wow, Jake. I didn't realize you wrote poetry! You never told me that ;o
lol.

EverlostPoet
May 9th, 2009, 07:08 PM
Thank you(:

Wow, Jake. I didn't realize you wrote poetry! You never told me that ;o
lol.

heh, yeah its more of a secret, but blame Josh, he gave me competition, lmao now me and him are like tied in good poetry.

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 07:09 PM
lol, well you shouldn't keep it a secret.
I'm a HxC Poet so if you ever need reviews, just ask me(:

EverlostPoet
May 9th, 2009, 07:11 PM
k ima upload them nao and post

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 07:12 PM
Alright :D
Send me the link when you're done.

EverlostPoet
May 9th, 2009, 07:17 PM
http://www.virtualteen.org/forums/showthread.php?p=508845#post508845 there hope you ppl like xD

ErykaInspire.
May 9th, 2009, 07:18 PM
Thanks(:

BuryYourFlame
May 10th, 2009, 02:41 AM
omg rach...two lines in and im already crying...:whoops:...awesome poem :D