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MysticalBurrito
April 9th, 2009, 01:24 PM
The flames that had demolished the house she used to live in
Detective Skippy had a idea of what could of happen.
"Did anyone have anything against your hamster, TattleTail?" he asked
They look at him puzzled.
The youngest speaks up first, "Well what do you think detective?"
she continues " I will give you a hint the name TattleTail tell you anything?"
The mother shushs her.
"Our dear hamster TattleTail didnt have any friends because she was well.... a TattleTail..."
She states with tears in her eyes.
He looks at the poor old woman "Did anyone want to hurt her?"
Mrs. BedBugs looks at him with teary eyes and sniffles. "Why yes actully this other rodent that lives down the street..."
She pauses for a second
"I think his name was Rat-In-My-Tooth-Pick"
The family watches as the ER brings out a body bag.
"Why? WHY?" Mrs. Bedbugs leans her head on her husbands shoulder and sobs.
"Ma'm we will everything to find out who killed TattleTail." He tells Mrs. Bedbugs
"Thank you.. Thank you very much Detective."
He heads home at 12am the next day exuasted and emotioinaly distreased
"I promised her that I would find out who killed her poor hamster!"
He mutters to himself.
"How am I going to find out who killed her if we have no evidence!"
He slams his fist against the table and his coffee spills on his new white shirt.
"Argh!!! IT BURNS!!!!!!!!!"
He scream, the glass shakes.
He tries to look at the burns but cant before he smells smoke,
the detective twirls around to find the whole left side of his house on fire
"how could I not notice that!?!"
Detective Skippy hears a voice
Skippy turns around to see the youngest daughter of the family
"I killed TattleTail then started the fire I was hoping they would think the stupid rodent died in her sleep, the reason I did it was because they loved the rodent more than me."
The sound of a gun clicking is the first sound he hears.
Nancy aims the gun
"you interfered with my plain prepare to die."
"look Nancy you dont have to do this"
He starts but its too late she fires the first shot to his knee then the next shot to his chest
She watches as he sinks to the floor holding his chest.
Nancy knicks him over as she walks out of the burning building and says
"I tried to warn you Detective Skippy."

















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Chapter two Detective Skippy Lives


The emergency room was atomished the John Doe had survived the fire
They tried to find out who he was but his memory was gone.
"Sir can you hear me?" The nurse asked.
"mumph" Came the reply.
"Do you know who did this to you?" Asked the detective.
Little did our John Doe know the guy questoning him was his boss Detective BeeHive
Skippy knew that he knew him but he couldnt put his finger on it,
"Detective?" Skippy wheezed out.
"Detective BeeHive I remember you.." He managed to say then broke into a fit of coughing.
"Skippy is that you?" asked Beehive.
"I think so I'm not sure I lost alomst all my memory in the fire but I am starting to remember some of it now.." another fit of coughing took over his chest.
"Do you remember who started the fire and shot you?"
"I think so....It was the youngest daughter.." He starts coughing again.
"She told me" he tries to breath inbetween gasps. "That her parents loved TattleTail more than her so she.."
All of a sudden the heart moniter started it alarm and the ER staff ran in to see Detective BeeHive shot in the chest three times and Skippy with his life suport removed.
They imeditly start working on Skippy
One nurse put him back on his suport and the other starts working on BeeHive.
"He's gone doctor." The nurse let go of BeeHives arm.
"DOCTOR!! Skippy is still alive!"
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A little girl walks out of ICU with a backpack.
"Hey little girl your not supost to be in there!"
The little girl smiles "I'm sorry I was just visiting a friend of the family I was told he wasnt going to live long.."
She sniffle pityful and walks away.
As soona s she is far away enough from the hospital she smiles and feels in her backpack for her gun noticing it is there she runs back home to put it away...





Chapter three- Detective Skippy gets kidnapped!

Later that day Nancy finds out Detective Skippy was still alive so she plots in her room.
She thought of a hit man but she thought that a hitman wouldnt do, she would have to find a way to kill him herself.
Nancy slowly packed the stuff she would need,
Handcuffs,
Ducktape
rope
Squirt gun
Mints....
plastic bags
and some lime away.
She was packed and ready to go
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Detective Skippy was getting ready to leave the hospital when somebody knocked on his door.
"who is it?" he asks scared it might be that little girl who killed Detective BeeHive..

TBC

Perseus
April 9th, 2009, 03:28 PM
Lol...
All that over a hamster...

MysticalBurrito
April 9th, 2009, 07:17 PM
I was in a goofy mood :P

Perseus
April 10th, 2009, 10:14 AM
When will you have the other crazy part of it? Lol, I want to know what happens... :D

YourFriend
April 10th, 2009, 11:20 AM
Where'd you get that imagination?

MysticalBurrito
April 10th, 2009, 01:38 PM
I grew up with it :D Jake the rest will come when my writers block is over :P

Perseus
April 14th, 2009, 09:42 PM
Ohh... Can't wait. XD

MysticalBurrito
May 29th, 2009, 12:11 PM
I don't know if that was sarcasm >_>

But it is finished


The flames that had demolished the house she used to live in
Detective Skippy had a idea of what could have happen.
"Did anyone have anything against your hamster, Tattletale?" he asked
They look at him puzzled.
The youngest speaks up first, "Well what do you think detective?"
She continues "I will give you a hint the name Tattletale tell you anything?"
The mother shushes her.
"Our dear hamster Tattletale didn’t have any friends because she was well.... a Tattletale..."
She states with tears in her eyes.
He looks at the poor old woman "Did anyone want to hurt her?"
Mrs. Bedbugs looks at him with teary eyes and sniffles. "Why yes actually this other rodent that lives down the street..."
She pauses for a second
"I think his name was Rat-In-My-Tooth-Pick"
The family watches as the ER brings out a body bag.
"Why? WHY?" Mrs. Bedbugs leans her head on her husbands shoulder and sobs.
"Maim we will everything to find out who killed Tattletale." He tells Mrs. Bedbugs
"Thank you. Thank you very much Detective."
He heads home at 12am the next day exhausted and emotionally distressed
"I promised her that I would find out who killed her poor hamster!"
He mutters to himself.
"How am I going to find out who killed her if we have no evidence!"
He slams his fist against the table and his coffee spills on his new white shirt.
"Argh!!! IT BURNS!!!!!!!!!"
He screams, the glass shakes.
He tries to look at the burns but cant before he smells smoke,
The detective twirls around to find the whole left side of his house on fire
"How could I not notice that!?!"
Detective Skippy hears a voice
Skippy turns around to see the youngest daughter of the family
"I killed Tattletale then started the fire I was hoping they would think the stupid rodent died in her sleep, the reason I did it was because they loved the rodent more than me."
The sound of a gun clicking is the first sound he hears.
Nancy aims the gun
"You interfered with my plain prepare to die."
"Look Nancy you don’t have to do this"
He starts but its too late she fires the first shot to his knee then the next shot to his chest
She watches as he sinks to the floor holding his chest.
Nancy knocks him over as she walks out of the burning building and says
"I tried to warn you Detective Skippy."

















~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Chapter two Detective Skippy Lives


The emergency room was astonished the John Doe had survived the fire
They tried to find out who he was but his memory was gone.
"Sir Can you hear me?" The nurse asked.
"Humph" Came the reply.
"Do you know who did this to you?" Asked the detective.
Little did our John Doe know the guy questioning him was his boss Detective Beehive?
Skippy knew that he knew him but he couldn’t put his finger on it,
"Detective?" Skippy wheezed out.
"Detective Beehive I remember you.” He managed to say then broke into a fit of coughing.
"Skippy is that you?" asked Beehive.
"I think so I'm not sure I lost almost all my memory in the fire but I am starting to remember some of it now…” another fit of coughing took over his chest.
"Do you remember who started the fire and shot you?"
"I think so....It was the youngest daughter…” He starts coughing again.
"She told me" he tries to breath in-between gasps. "That her parents loved Tattletale more than her so she…”
All of a sudden the heart monitor started it alarm and the ER staff ran in to see Detective Beehive shot in the chest three times and Skippy with his life support removed.
They immediately start working on Skippy
One nurse put him back on his support and the other starts working on Beehive.
"He's gone doctor." The nurse let go of Beehives arm.
"DOCTOR!! Skippy is still alive!"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
A little girl walks out of ICU with a backpack.
"Hey little girl your not suppose to be in there!"
The little girl smiles "I'm sorry I was just visiting a friend of the family I was told he wasn’t going to live long…”
She sniffle pitiful and walks away.
As soon s she is far away enough from the hospital she smiles and feels in her backpack for her gun noticing it is there she runs back home to put it away...





Chapter three- Detective Skippy gets kidnapped!

Later that day Nancy finds out Detective Skippy was still alive so she plots in her room.
She thought of a hit man but she thought that a hetmans wouldn’t do, she would have to find a way to kill him herself.
Nancy slowly packed the stuff she would need,
Handcuffs,
Duck tape
Rope
Squirt gun
Mints....
Plastic bags
And some lime away.
She was packed and ready to go
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Detective Skippy was getting ready to leave the hospital when somebody knocked on his door.
"Who is it?" he asks scared it might be that little girl who killed Detective Beehive.
"Its housekeeping," Nancy lied.
Skippy knew he recognized that voice something about it,
Something familiar.
He looks through the peep hole trying to see if it was "her".
The door creaks open as he opens it, Skippy looks both ways then stop when a cold gun is pressed to the back of his head.
"So we meet again." The voice is muffled with a cloth so he can’t tell who it is
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Nancy had been planning this for so long, she was going to kill Detective Skippy, She despised that guy. He knew it too
Nancy had tried to kill him three times now and it wasn’t working,
I need to kill him before everyone find out I killed Tattletale.
She paces back and forth trying to work up a plan, Ticked off she grabs her squirt gun and walks out.
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After she knocked him out, her efforts to drag his body out of the hospital where not working so Nancy grabbed a body bag and greased the bottom and pushed it out with a swift kick.
A scream comes from the body bad as a truck runs over the foot part, Nancy laughs evilly as Detective Skippy is in pain.
After she knocks him out again she takes him to her lair and ties him upside down to the top of the ceiling
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After he wakes up Skippy feels a terrible pain in his head the feeling of blood rushing to his head, he knew he could only survive a little longer hanging like this so he had to hatch a plain to get down.
The pain was getting worse and it had been only five minutes and every time he moved the ropes got tighter around his wrists, neck and feet.
Skippy had to think fast or he would be dead in the next three hours!
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Nancy had been watching TV when the cops called her house asking for her parents, She told then they where not there and hung up.
She was angry because her plain to kill him wasn’t working and if her parents went in her room they would see him dangling there like a wind chime.
Then as soon as she thought that she descides to check on her prison.
As soon as she looks in her room the dread fills her, Detective Skippy was gone.
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The end
Sorry I couldn’t find the rest of it

Perseus
May 29th, 2009, 09:09 PM
I was not being sarcastic, and the ending is a cliffhanger... -.-

MysticalBurrito
May 29th, 2009, 09:12 PM
XD sorry the rest got deleted :(