Hmm

[Burnthecity]

its hard
Cause you told me
I was the one
the one who would be in your heart
always
and forever
but you lies
you did
its wasnt true
i belived it
i belived in you
and now
its hard
i wheap
i wheap for remorse
breathing hurts
it hurts so bad
my lungs, tear, they break, they rip
while you sit there
without a tear in sight
without a care in the world
i sit here
alone
and i cry
and nothing you ever say or do will change this
you hurt me
and you want one thing
you want whats best for you
you acted like i was the one
but in your mind
i wasnt, there were others
and you knew it
so why do it
why put pain inside of me
becuase your one thing
your one thing


shallow.







not sure where this came from. i dono i started writing, and this is just how i feel right now....

[Underground_Network]

That's pretty f-ing cool Lou. I like it.

But I think it should be "lied" not "lies," "it wasn't true" not "its wasn't true" and at the end it should be "you're" not "your." I'm also pretty sure "wheap" is spelled weep. But yeah, we all make grammar/spelling errors (I always f up with commas and semicolons, etc.). That and those don't really matter, because that's a really good piece of writing. I like it, and I've felt that way before too... It actually kinda looks like something I'd right. :)

[Burnthecity]

thankyou, but yeah at the time, grammer wasn't an issue so i just didnt bother haha