"the story" mom dad stefan and finally me

[phish]

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[Zephyr]

The White Padded Room -----> The Open Book

[phish]

Here is the FUCKING problem here the god damn mother fucking mods think they are fucking god and take it apon them salves to do what they want to the posts they want. My post is not hurting anyone why move it?

[Sage]

I was born august first 1995. At the time Stefan

Needs capital.

(my only brother)

One > Only.

was six, almost seven.

Don't mix numbers and spelling, stick with one or the other. Also, you needed a comma.

My parents_(Evelyn and Peter Chase) were both fourty-two.

Space before brackets, capitalization of proper nouns, and again with the numbers thing.

Little to their

Please remember the proper uses of there/their/they're.

biggest headache they ever had.

Headache is one word.

I had problems, and big ones at that. My mother looked to alternative medicine, my father on the other hand

Split these sentences up and add in some commas.

thought more on the lines of "wip his ass" kind of idea.

Just... rephrase this altogether. It's so weird to say. Why not 'thought "whipping his ass" was a better idea.' ?

Little did they know neither were the right road to take. Maybe something in between.

Again, replacing your weird phrases, typos, and such.

I would do things along the lines of bashing holes in the wall, breaking windows, those sorts of things..

Commas, commas, commas. ._.

My mother thought it was linked to eating things such as red dyes, while my father thought it was just what I wanted to do. They both had a little peace of the puzzle.

Typos mostly in this part. And commas. And split those damn sentences.

So anyway that is it a mothers strugle to find help for her son via her sons eyes.

Just rephrase that altogether. It's weird to say.

All in all your punctuation and grammatical errors are making this a pain to read and you've little in the way of wonderful things to say anyhow. Throw in some adjectives and adverbs, change up words you're using, spell check the thing.

Here is the FUCKING problem here the god damn mother fucking mods think they are fucking god and take it apon them salves to do what they want to the posts they want. My post is not hurting anyone why move it?

Don't throw a tantrum. It makes you look immature. Your post was in the wrong forum, it got moved. I'm sorry.

[phish]

Needs capital.



One > Only.



Don't mix numbers and spelling, stick with one or the other. Also, you needed a comma.



Space before brackets, capitalization of proper nouns, and again with the numbers thing.



Please remember the proper uses of there/their/they're.



Headache is one word.



Split these sentences up and add in some commas.



Just... rephrase this altogether. It's so weird to say. Why not 'thought "whipping his ass" was a better idea.' ?



Again, replacing your weird phrases, typos, and such.



Commas, commas, commas. ._.



Typos mostly in this part. And commas. And split those damn sentences.



Just rephrase that altogether. It's weird to say.

All in all your punctuation and grammatical errors are making this a pain to read and you've little in the way of wonderful things to say anyhow. Throw in some adjectives and adverbs, change up words you're using, spell check the thing.



Don't throw a tantrum. It makes you look immature. Your post was in the wrong forum, it got moved. I'm sorry.








What do you think it is going to look like i have only been threw 123 and filed 4th grade.

[Sage]

I don't need to lower my standards of criticism just because you have lower standards of writing. All I'm doing is correcting your mistakes. If you don't want criticism, then it's pointless to post.

Edit: Wait. How old are you?

[Zephyr]

Um, no.
I do believe I'm Stephanie, not God.

Your post got moved because it was in the wrong forum.
You'll get better posts/results if you post in the correct forum,
So it was simply to help you out.

Have a nice day :daisy: