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SingASadSong4408
February 4th, 2009, 08:28 PM
this is a song I wrote, and yeah.... just wondering what everyone thought? if it sucks, tell me. it you like it tell me. either way I'll thank you!


Little White, Artificially Bright Lie


visitation hours are ending soon
the medication' all locked up
in that room
over there
but you dont care
do ya? (do ya?)
you dont believe me
you think its all one big party
on the phsyciatric ward
well you've been warned

everything here is way to white
my roommate cries herself to sleep at night
the nurses look down on us like we're
out of our mind
and maybe we are
and maybe its just another
little white artificially bright lie
la la
oh little white artificially bright lie
la la lies la la

the doctor comes in with my daily dose of medication
oh yea
he laughs a fake laugh and says 'dont worry
just consider this
a vacation'
i look at him skeptically he looks away
funny how i already know
i'm not ok
oh no

you dont believe me
you think its all one big pary on
the phsyciatric ward
well you've been warned


everything here is way to white
my roommate cries herself to sleep at night
the nurses look down on us like we're
out of our mind
and maybe we are
and maybe its just another
little white artificially bright lie
la la
oh little white artificially bright lie
la la lies la la

the shrink comes in
I pretend to pay attention
reminds me of school
and that hour of detention
staring at a blank wall
nothing above you
and nothing below
to catch you when you fall oh woah


everything here is way to white
my roommate cries herself to sleep at night
the nurses look down on us like we're
out of our minds
and maybe we are
and maybe it’s just another
little white artificially bright lie
la la
oh little white artificially bright lie
la la lies la la

the way no light
shines through the bars on the window
i know its late at night
and this room is still too bright
they say were in sane
causing everyone else pain
they give us the pills then go away
say maybe they'll see us
another day
oh woah oh


everything here is way to white
my roommate cries herself to sleep at night
the nurses look down on us like we're
out of our minds
and maybe we are
and maybe its just another
little white artificially bright lie
la la
oh little white artificially bright lie
la la lies la la

la la la oh la de da la de da oh la
la la la lies
oh lies.

there it is. most of my work isnt this.... i dont know, emo isnt the right word... i suppose 'different' is a right word. just tell me what you think!

Thanks!!!
---SingASadSong4408 (a.k.a. Carlie)

-Silence
February 5th, 2009, 10:32 AM
Hey Carlie, welcome to VT.

I like it, it flows very smoothly, and again I just really like it.
Good Job!

Kiros
February 5th, 2009, 02:39 PM
Actually, yeah. I like it. It's not easy writing a song either, so kudos, Carlie :)

Stark
February 8th, 2009, 09:02 PM
I like it.