Stark
February 2nd, 2009, 06:11 PM
"Some police are investigating a bunch of murders in a little town surrounded by swampland, and then the police get killed, and then the townspeople start doing some investigating of their own, and find the person doing the killings isn't really a person, it's a horrid monster that appears unstoppable, but they have to find a way to stop it before the town, becomes a ghost town."
So what do you think? I need all the criticism I can get.
Please comment, I need some ideas.
"There are a lot of murders and kidnappings in a little town in the middle of nowhere, and a well respected cop comes down to try and find the killer, but then the local police find that the well respected cop is the killer, and they arrest him. But, there are still more disappearances, and it turns out that the cop they arrested was blackmailed into killing the people, because he was about to find the actual killer, so the killer kidnapped his family to make the cop do whatever he wanted, and then the hunt begins to find the killer before anything worse happens."
This story was originally a monster story, and that the police were hunting down a monster, but they just thought they were hunting a person. Tell me what version you think is better, or if you think they are both crap... be honest. And I'm having trouble coming up with a name for the town, so if you could give me some ideas that would be great.
So what do you think? I need all the criticism I can get.
Please comment, I need some ideas.
"There are a lot of murders and kidnappings in a little town in the middle of nowhere, and a well respected cop comes down to try and find the killer, but then the local police find that the well respected cop is the killer, and they arrest him. But, there are still more disappearances, and it turns out that the cop they arrested was blackmailed into killing the people, because he was about to find the actual killer, so the killer kidnapped his family to make the cop do whatever he wanted, and then the hunt begins to find the killer before anything worse happens."
This story was originally a monster story, and that the police were hunting down a monster, but they just thought they were hunting a person. Tell me what version you think is better, or if you think they are both crap... be honest. And I'm having trouble coming up with a name for the town, so if you could give me some ideas that would be great.