Goodnight, and Goodbye

[ShatteredWings]

No tears little baby
Your time is near
Quiet young child
Your pain I hear
I hate to remember
But, child, I’ve been there
The silence is overwhelming
But honey do not fear

Your relief will come
Just find your pen
And write to me
Your pain
Your hate
Your end

Don’t cry
It’s better than you think
Because no longer
You are standing at the brink.



[side note: i did not know i could rhyme at all...]

[please help me 69]

thats really good

[Neverender]

sounds like a child suicide note.


:D but its lovely just the same.

[nachtspiegel]

You did really good with this one.

[ShatteredWings]

sounds like a child suicide note.


:D but its lovely just the same.

Why does all my writing make this comment?
*not suicidal*

[Kaleidoscope Eyes]

girl;413949']Why does all my writing make this comment?
*not suicidal*

Don't worry, I used to get similar comments about my work. xP Just keep up whatever you're doing, let it flow.

You did a nice job with this one. I didn't find it suicidal at all, I interpreted it as an expression of why you write, of why anyone writes. It's a creative outlet, a coping mechanism, a means of putting your soul down on paper. You've told this child that it's ok to have sorrow but that it's time to get back into the sunlight, to get it out and let it go.

I like it. :)