Appear.

[Atonement]

I seperated this from my journal of poetry just because I like it and i dont like to specifically write about this in my journal of poetry so... here it goes.

Appear.

I hide the marks,
The scratches the red,
So no one will notice,
Where I have bled.

I wear the right clothing,
I walk the right way,
So no one will notice,
And no one will say,

"What happened to you?
Are you okay?
Do you need to talk?"
Just walk away.

I'm so scared of them learning,
Of seeing who I am,
I put up this wall,
To protect my sham.

But deep down inside,
I want someone to question,
So I can get out,
And rise from depression.

Like an idiot I hide it,
I conceal all my tears,
So I can't help myself,
Or so it appears.

[Raynes]

9/10

[Atonement]

Um. Thanks I guess. I want another point!

^^ perfectionism at its best, everyone.

[theOperaGhost]

I think this is definitely your best, or at least close. I gave you rep, that's basically a 10/10.

[Atonement]

Yay for approval of emo writing. -.- ha.

[theOperaGhost]

Isn't all writing emo writing? Writing is supposed to convey some kind of emotion, thus making it emo writing :P.

[Atonement]

I want more people to comment!

[The Batman]

Wow that was amazing I loved it.

[Atonement]

Thanks a ton.

MORE PEOPLE COMMENT!

[george]

This definitely has to be your best one ever. Loved how it flowed but you need to make more poems for us to read :]

[Zephyr]

I want more people to comment!

Whore.


I totally relate though.
You hide everything,
But deep down you want somebody to get it.
Just some random person or stranger.
Somebody to see through your eloquently designed facade.

Rep+

[Atonement]

yay for understanding it.

And I am so not an attention whore, I just like criticism.

[Fiending_the_freedom]

i definitely loved this, one of, if not my fav.
You definitely got a lottttt of people that can relate EXACTLY to this.
great work.

[Atonement]

Thanks tegan. MORE PEOPLE CRITICIZE ME!

[Φρανκομβριτ]

Tegan really said it. It's very easy to relate to. Awesome poem Addi!

[cookiegirl]

first off i want to say how dare you guys rate it... its not for your enjoyment... its not for your pleasure.. its a cry for help!!!!! Addi i am praying for you.. and i know some others are too... stay strong each day is a struggle i know trust me... i never cut hard enough to leave a mark.. so nobody would question me... but i have not cut in i think its now almost 4 years this year .. there are days i want to i wont lie . but i know certain people (Jared) would be mad if i did so i don't because i don't want to hurt them.. stay strong dear just know i am always here for you if you want my # so you can text me send me a message on msn and i will give it to you....everyone who said lots of people can relate you are completely correct addi put this out for anyone to read let those kids who are about to take their own lives that they are not alone dispite what they think ... wow you wanted a review and you got a book lol well these are just my thought i did like it but i know its not for my entertainment it is a cry for help and i am answering it... i am here for you to help you to guide you to pray for you just know i am here