Lies and Sins - Alex D

[Ryandel]

Not my normal style of poetry. I'm more of the soul and love kind. But I had a bad day and it was raining. We all have our "emo" days and this poem is the result of that day.


Existing in this place now are uncleanable lies
I wonder when it has begun
How far do I
Have to go to see the light


You will live in shadow
of shade and commit eighth sin
Unrequited existence will turn
Everything into sin

~Alex

[theOperaGhost]

That's good, Alex! I like it very much.

[Ryandel]

Haha thanks. It's pure amateur. It seems... unfinished to me. But thanks!

[Zephyr]

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The shortness of it makes it more effective,
In my opinion.
It gives you just enough insight,
But not too much,
So it leaves you thinking.
Poetry that leaves me thinking it my favorite.

[Ryandel]

Thanks Steph. I guess you're right. But later on I might adapt from it and make a similar poem or just continue this one.