Request.

[Atonement]

Right well, I felt like making this one into its own thread... if it sucks, I will remove it. Just let me know if you hate it or love it. If you are reading this you better FREAKING comment... please?


Request.

Hello mother.
Whatcha up to?
Are you busy?
When will you be through?

Oh theres more?
A couple more trials?
When will this end?
Just a couple more miles?

You occupy yourself,
With those others kids,
But you have ignored me,
As they all flipped their lids.

I sit in the corner,
Staying out of your way,
So the other people get help,
And more can come stay.

I am your son,
Yet you choose to over see,
OOOO did you notice me?!
Now who could that be?

Oh no,
I just had to do the dishes,
And bow down,
to the others wishes.

Hey mom,
Look over here!
Can I just have a second,
So I can bend your ear?

Aren't I your son?
Why do they come first?
I need you mother,
I think I might burst!

I get you do good,
I understand they need help,
But can't I just talk to you,
So I can cover up my yelp?

Just acknowledge me,
Show me a sign,
Come on mom,
We need to draw a line.

Choose them or me,
Just let me know,
So I can not hate them
And stop feeling so low.

[Zan0ra]

To answer your question. I love it! nice inspires idea aswell.

[krystalm]

wow, this is really well written, i love it and the style.

[theOperaGhost]

I love it, Addison. Actually, I think I may finally have a favorite. It gave me chills a little bit. It is definitely one of your best.

[Atonement]

Your favorite? my best? okay... If you say so.