Pressure

[Atonement]

Stop it already,
All you do is want,
I don't want to perform,
All I've done is flaunt.

You want me to be better,
I have to be the best,
What are the effects,
I'll have on the rest?

My peers hate me,
They sneer at my sight,
They make me suffer,
Just out of spite.

I want to fail,
So I won't get the marks,
I wont get in fights,
That set off my sparks.

Its not my fault I'm good,
I only do the work.
Yet you criticize me,
And think of me as a jerk?

I'm gifted in knowledge,
This is my new curse,
It has ruined my life,
How could it be worse?

She told me to be good,
Do my best in class,
Well she fucked me over,
She can kiss my ass.

[george]

It had an interesting ending :D Wasn't expecting that. Great poem :)

[Atonement]

Thanks

[SirRawrsalot]

Wow, really well written. That's now my favorite poem of all time.

[Mannequin]

honestly, the rhyming is iffy in certain areas and you're talking first about "them" and then a "she" pops out. it's just not really consistent.

[Atonement]

I am speaking about 8 different people at any given time. sorry.

[SirRawrsalot]

1 I don't thiink that poems have to rhyme....none of mine do :P (unless it's on accident).

2 Where is the inconsistency? "My peers hate me,
They sneer at my sight,
They make me suffer," - the they has been addressed as "my peers" so different people


then there's a bunch of "you" and then a "she" (which I'm assuming the "you" is the "she" )

So it seems consistent. Still my favorite poem

[Atonement]

you is everyone, them are my peers and she is a secret.

[SirRawrsalot]

Ok. You addressing everyone threw me off. lol However I use things in my poems I end up using the same rules for other poems. It's a bad habit I guess.