something i wrote

[Gumleaf]

this is something i wrote to my girlfriend and i feel like sharing it now. its not real good, but she liked it which is the main thing.


from the moment we met, you made me feel special
you showed me true friendship, when all others seemed to fail
you make me happy, beyond ever before
the feeling of your hugs, always makes things better then before

when i feel pain, you are always there
you make me feel better and know what to say
i can't help but feel loved, when you're with me always
the love you share with me, makes me feel special always

you are my girlfriend and best friend always
you make feel bright and bring out the best in me
you are the best thing in my life and the most beautiful person i know
you are an amazing person both inside an out

i will always love and care for you
i will always be there for you
i will always be your best friend
i will always love you in my heart

[japanman]

*Clap* or as my langauge arts teacher would make us do *snap snap* lol

That was an awsome poem stephen. Very good job on it. :)

[SirRawrsalot]

I loved it. The only thing is that you didn't have any confidence in it.

[Gumleaf]

I loved it. The only thing is that you didn't have any confidence in it.

confidence is something i seriously lack with writing stuff like this.

[Tis_Sam]

Not bad :)

[SirRawrsalot]

What's to worry about? Bad comments? I strive to get people to say what's wrong with my poems for improvement. No poem is without criticism. If someone says something really rude just ignore it. It's all opinions and interpretations.

[AutumnDae]

I love it! It's good Stephen!

[Gumleaf]

What's to worry about? Bad comments? I strive to get people to say what's wrong with my poems for improvement. No poem is without criticism. If someone says something really rude just ignore it. It's all opinions and interpretations.

i don't mind criticism at all. in fact i wouldn't mind if heaps of people comment on this poemy thing. but the fact remains that my confidence in my writing ability is low, mainly because its not a strength of mine, and i accept that.


I love it! It's good Stephen!

thanks autumn! :D

[SirRawrsalot]

Well, with a poem like that and poetry abilities to have written that, you have plenty to be confident about.

[kerry]

Awwwww thats cute
very good stephen

[Gumleaf]

Well, with a poem like that and poetry abilities to have written that, you have plenty to be confident about.

thanks, i'm working on something else to give to jo tomorrow for our 4 month anniversary. if its ok i'll post it.

[SirRawrsalot]

I can't wait to read it. I bet that Jo will like it.

[Gumleaf]

ok, so this is what i have written for joanne for our official 4 month anniversary today. i'll be giving it to her later when i see her, so this i guess is a preview.


my love for you

i remember the day i told you i liked you
i remember the day we first held hands
i remember the day you first kissed me
i remember the day i fell in love with you

you showed me what it is to be loved
you showed me what true love is
you showed me what love and care is
you showed me what true best friends do

you are the best girlfriend ever
you are there for me when i am sick
you are there for me when i am down
you are there for me when i am upset

i love everything there is about you
i love the way you smile when you're happy
i love the way you laugh and the sound of your voice
i love the way you look even when you look you worst

my love for you will never stop
my love for you will be there always
my love for you is always growing
my love for you is just so strong

[SirRawrsalot]

I really think she'll love it because, what girl doesn't atleast appreciate poetry? I do have one advice, go to an online thesaurus (dictionary.com has one) and if you use aword more than 3 or 4 times look up a synonym for it. If there are absolutely none, then just roll with it. Sometimes the synonyms don't fit though, so be cautious. All in all a great poem. She'll be impressed.

[Gumleaf]

ok, so this is what i have written for joanne for our official 4 month anniversary today. i'll be giving it to her later when i see her, so this i guess is a preview.


my love for you

i remember the day i told you i liked you
i remember the day we first held hands
i remember the day you first kissed me
i remember the day i fell in love with you

you showed me what it is to be loved
you showed me what true love is
you showed me what love and care is
you showed me what true best friends do

you are the best girlfriend ever
you are there for me when i am sick
you are there for me when i am down
you are there for me when i am upset

i love everything there is about you
i love the way you smile when you're happy
i love the way you laugh and the sound of your voice
i love the way you look even when you look you worst

my love for you will never stop
my love for you will be there always
my love for you is always growing
my love for you is just so strong


when joanne read this yesterday it actually brought her to tears. that actually makes me happy, because i know she appreciated it. :D