My poem

[DaretoFallup]

dunno if this is the right spot btw, feel free to move it.
ok this is a poem i made called Sorrow

Sorrow
Sorrow is
Pools of tears.
Sorrow is
a death
an accident
Sorrow is depression
Severe enough
To threaten a life.
Sorrow is
Sadness devastating
to anyone.




Ok what u guys think?


also another thing i wrote...

Suicide
Why
Why do we fight?
Why do we cry?
Why isn't the world a good place to live?
why can't we go just one day
Just one day without violence
blood shed
tears shed
what happens when people have had enough...
only one thing
Suicide

[Ryandel]

Very... Deep I guess.

[DaretoFallup]

Very... Deep I guess.

not sure if thats good or bad lol:confused:

[robbiehay1]

no thats a good thing, your pretty good :P

[DaretoFallup]

no thats a good thing, your pretty good :P

cool thanks :)

[DaretoFallup]

another one that i wrote....

Alone
alone in this dark place
no one but me
i see so many people
but no one sees me
i'm all alone
I fear everything around me
shadows
skulls
blood dripping down the walls
no one...no one at all can hear my screams of terror
its just me and me alone
just me fearing it all

[DaretoFallup]

Can i get some more comments please, if not can someone give me a different topic to right about, lol my dark days are over :)

[Ryandel]

not sure if thats good or bad lol:confused:

It's a good thing. If I criticized, I would've elaborated on it. Also you wanted another topic, so how about something from within you.

Topic: What Happiness Is In Your Perspective

[DaretoFallup]

It's a good thing. If I criticized, I would've elaborated on it. Also you wanted another topic, so how about something from within you.

Topic: What Happiness Is In Your Perspective

cool thanks, working on that now:D YES! new topic :yeah: lol...im tired of writing about dark topics lol