America II

[kolte]

A land thats filled with benifits
Looks great from the outside
You don't imagine hipocrytes
commiting suicide
And a land that looks so beautiful
that holds such promise too
You cant imagine a more crul world
that nolonger holds itself true

If you roam across a sea or too
you will shore on a promise land
A place full of opritunity for you
A world that seems so grand
But if you step off of your boat
and delve in through the thick
you will discover death afloat
And it may make you sick

The people inside don't give a damn
about themsleves or one another
They would give the world to uncle sam
and abandon there own mother
Scared of their own nuclear power
In fear they might get hurt
They all consume guns and cower
in suberbs were they lurck

Were the death toll is catostrophic
and the people they all suffer
its not a war or plauge the offs them
Its guns used on one another
But the government just lets them be
unless there cought doing drugs
all the prisions are filled you see
With pot addicted slugs

No room for the rapist or the killer
No room for the smuggling freaks
just for the mary jane chiller
with their rosy pot head cheeks (lol)
Yes this land sounds horrible indeed it is
one of the worst worlds in this place
It might come off as a place of biz
but this land is the united states.

[Oath]

OMG i love it so much you should publish that or something its so goooood......!!!

[nullandvoid123]

i just have one thing to say. fuck you. i hate it when americans take for granted what they have here. look at china goddamn it! a communism! is that what you fucking want? look around you. america is the greatest country in the world, and your just another blind cock ass that doesnt see the virtue they have here.

[teencrazykid]

Actually Kolte is right.....America has a lot of work to do.
America has a terrible crime rate, high teen pregnancies, and too many people who have trouble living on a daily basis because stupid ass Bush wants to spend money on stupid shit. As selfish as it sounds ITS AMERICAS MONEY...AMERICA SHOULD COME FIRST!!!!!!

[nullandvoid123]

Actually Kolte is right.....America has a lot of work to do.
America has a terrible crime rate, high teen pregnancies, and too many people who have trouble living on a daily basis because stupid ass Bush wants to spend money on stupid shit. As selfish as it sounds ITS AMERICAS MONEY...AMERICA SHOULD COME FIRST!!!!!!
first of all, bush is a good president, and you liberal democrats cant see that behind your narrow point of view. secondly, there are huge crime rates in every country. its not just something in america (again, a narrow liberal view). teen pregnancys happen everywhere, not just here, and bush isnt spending money on "stupid shit." is liberating Iraq not a good cause? liberal point of view. and, no matter what you say, bush does put america first. look at september eleventh, asshole.

[nwshc]

i just have one thing to say. fuck you. i hate it when americans take for granted what they have here. look at china goddamn it! a communism! is that what you fucking want? look around you. america is the greatest country in the world, and your just another blind cock ass that doesnt see the virtue they have here.
Bah, you just can't going around saying fuck you to every hater. You just can't. I don't like it, but you just have to take it and think to yourself I know America is not like that.

Actually Kolte is right.....America has a lot of work to do.
America has a terrible crime rate, high teen pregnancies, and too many people who have trouble living on a daily basis because stupid ass Bush wants to spend money on stupid shit. As selfish as it sounds ITS AMERICAS MONEY...AMERICA SHOULD COME FIRST!!!!!!
Yes we do have alot of work to do. What you people don't under stand is we are only 200+ years old! We are still learning. Places like england and europe have existed for hundreds of years, and they put that expirence to good use. We only have 200 years under our belt. We are still an ongoing project.
We have no such high teen pregnancies. That is a compleat lie. Teen pregnacies have been declining for 5 years, and most kids are waiting. Your comment has no basis.
Look around you. Bush is not throwing cash out to fucking sea you twat. Everything goes back to America! Learn about what you are fucking talking about.

[nullandvoid123]

Bah, you just can't going around saying fuck you to every hater. You just can't. I don't like it, but you just have to take it and think to yourself I know America is not like that.
yeah, i know, but it just really pisses me off when an american talks lying trash about their own country, like this guy.
Yes we do have alot of work to do. What you people don't under stand is we are only 200+ years old! We are still learning. Places like england and europe have existed for hundreds of years, and they put that expirence to good use. We only have 200 years under our belt. We are still an ongoing project.
We have no such high teen pregnancies. That is a compleat lie. Teen pregnacies have been declining for 5 years, and most kids are waiting. Your comment has no basis.
Look around you. Bush is not throwing cash out to fucking sea you twat. Everything goes back to America! Learn about what you are fucking talking about.
can't agree more.

[Anonymous]

this isnt a debate you assholes! It's incredible writng! That was amazing kolte!

[nwshc]

No its wasn't. It is awful.

[kolte]

Well I'm glad you took so much interest in my work. Thanxs for all the wounderful comments.

[teencrazykid]

Actually, we shoulda took out Saddam and left Iraq. American soldiers shouldnt have to die defending those who dont even want us there!!!!!! The U.S. is in deficit, so apparently Bush lost the little brains he has somewhere....

[kolte]

the us has allways been in deficit, in fact one of the only presidents who has ever brought out of deficet would be prez clinton. Oh and to all of you who ruined my poem by being negitive.


first of all, bush is a good president, and youliberal democrats cant see that behind your narrow point of view. secondly, there are huge crime rates in every country. its not just something in america (again, a narrow liberal view). teen pregnancys happen everywhere, not just here, and bush isnt spending money on "stupid shit." is liberating Iraq not a good cause? liberal point of view. and, no matter what you say, bush does put america first. look at september eleventh, asshole.

O.k. first off, please don't cause a debate in this, it really messes with my poem. If you don't have anything nice to say don't say anything at all. And if you were too look up liberal in teh dictionary you would find that it means and i quote:

" Favoring proposals for reform, open to new ideas for progress, and tolerant of the ideas and behavior of others; broad-minded."

notice the broad minded part. I don't know why you said narrow minded you truly most not know what liberal means. but lets see, I would presume that you were conservitive, seeing as how you hate liberals, note, we don't hate you, and the definition of conservitive is:

"Favoring traditional views and values; tending to oppose change."

oh my, now whos the narrow minded one. Conservitive, opposed to change (narrow minded) and Liberal, broad minded.....must i continue.

Oh and I'm looking at september 11th. and I wonder why bush let that happen, when he recived documents stating that osama bin laden was planing to do it. If you don't believe me. Ask Condaliza Rice(spelling) she is the one who gave him the document while he was on vaction in tx.

[nullandvoid123]

Actually, we shoulda took out Saddam and left Iraq. American soldiers shouldnt have to die defending those who dont even want us there!!!!!! The U.S. is in deficit, so apparently Bush lost the little brains he has somewhere.... the only ones that dont want us there are the rebels. EVERYONE ELSE DOES. you only know what you hear on the news, nothing else. GET YOUR FUCKING FACTS STRAIGHT.the us has allways been in deficit, in fact one of the only presidents who has ever brought out of deficet would be prez clinton. Oh and to all of you who ruined my poem by being negitive. name 5 things president clinton did to help this nation.seeing as how you hate liberals i never said i hate liberals. i said i hate citizens of america who are to blind to see what a great country we have.and I wonder why bush let that happen, when he recived documents stating that osama bin laden was planing to do it. If you don't believe me. Ask Condaliza Rice(spelling) she is the one who gave him the document while he was on vaction in tx. you do know that bush only got that report a few months before the attacks? do you really think he could send the whole military over to afganastan, hunt down bin laden, and apprehend him in that amount of time? and it's pure bullshit that he did nothing. look at how our country was united during september eleventh. i dont call that failure. Conservatism: Caution or moderation, as in behavior or outlook. Conservatives take caution in the government, and don't just pass radical ideas that they think at the time will help the country. and by the way, i wasn't calling you a liberal, i was using liberal as an adjective for democrat, which i was calling you.Liberal: a. Not limited to or by established, traditional, orthodox, or authoritarian attitudes, views, or dogmas; free from bigotry. if you didnt know, dogmas are an authoritative principle, belief, or statement of ideas or opinion, especially one considered to be absolutely true. belief, ideas, opinion. put into effect if they are only BELIEVED to be true. conservatives make sure they have everything straight before they pass it. obviously from this poem, you look at the negatives of america. THAT is why you are narrowminded, my friend.

[kolte]

I am a liberal democrate thankyou very much, and I do not ONLY look at america and see the bad things. I look at the country and want change for the better. I wouldn't pick out the falws and tired to find a way to make them better if I didnt love my countries. Don't judge a book by its cover, its a peom of how I feel and I am given the freedom to fell as I want because I'm an american and I have the right.

[nwshc]

hump...

Ok, Zach. Just drop it. This is neither the time and place. Oh, and Clinton did do a lot for this country.

kolte, sorry about my comment. I just got caught up in the moment. I'm not really a poem man and thats why I do not come around here.

[nullandvoid123]

clinton didn't do much for this country except lie to us.

[nwshc]

Wow, he lied to us about him having sex with another woman. Seriously who cares.
Millions of men and women do it every day. That does not make it right, but still.

[nullandvoid123]

he lied under oath. that is a federal crime there, buddy.

[nwshc]

So are you saying he should have been impeached? Having an afair does not merit an impeachment.

[nullandvoid123]

wow you really are a retard. first of all, impeachment is having charges brought up against you, not being thrown out of office. so he WAS impeached. secondly, the affair wouldn't have meant impeachment if he would have told the truth. HE LIED UNDER OATH, THAT'S WHY HE WAS IMPEACHED. you dont know what your talking about.

[nwshc]

You are right. I have no idea what I am talking about. I did not know what impeached ment and I am sorry for giving false information.

[kolte]

zach if you do not stop debating I'm going to recomend that you be banned/frozen to the administration.

[Elokyn]

Kolte..that is AMAZING work *claps* bravo