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Mannequin
May 27th, 2008, 11:08 PM
I've been left alone
To sort my thoughts.
When after all these times
I know I should've not.

I missed the notice today.
I cannot follow the mass.
Society's way left me here.
I am torn by aghast.

I missed the notice today.
I will never be accepted.
I trusted only sparsely.
Now I am rejected.

I missed the notice today.
I loved, but was too immature.
I walked away into the faded gray.
I learned I cannot be so sure.

I missed the notice today.

Mannequin
June 11th, 2008, 03:08 PM
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Underground_Network
June 11th, 2008, 03:10 PM
I like it, it flows really well, though I don't know if the line "I am torn by aghast" makes any sense.. :/ Unless there's a comma after "by"?