"Lamentations"(A Shakespearean Sonnet)

[Microcosm]

This one I wrote for fun.

To break these wretched bonds of lowly storms,
like hurricanes of blind and bare lament.
They're taking only ostentatious forms;
such horrid dreams of grief as this they've sent.

To break these wretched bonds of lowly rains,
Upon the clouds I sing as they doth part...
Forget this fallen rose's broken chains;
She's lost her budding flaws with which she starts.

To see these broken bonds express their angst,
they echo silent grief upon their chains.
To whom shall I express my lowly thanks?
For none, as all through this are lowly rains.

To see these shackles broken from my wrists,
means nothing if these storms remain adrift.

[Let Me Be a Pony]

This one I wrote for fun.

To break these wretched bonds of lowly storms,
like hurricanes of blind and bare lament.
They're taking only ostentatious forms;
such horrid dreams of grief as this they've sent.

To break these wretched bonds of lowly rains,
Upon the clouds I sing as they doth part...
Forget this fallen rose's broken chains;
She's lost her budding flaws with which she starts.

To see these broken bonds express their angst,
they echo silent grief upon their chains.
To whom shall I express my lowly thanks?
For none, as all through this are lowly rains.

To see these shackles broken from my wrists,
means nothing if these storms remain adrift.

I like the symbolism in this. Each time I read this I try to find more and more symbolism - UNDER THE above layer of symbolism.
Poetry... confusing symbolism always is at bay when the poetics are good.
Good job, made me wonder for awhile on a lot of events while reading this over and over. :)
You know when you're reading something good when it makes you wonder in different directions.

[Microcosm]

I like the symbolism in this. Each time I read this I try to find more and more symbolism - UNDER THE above layer of symbolism.
Poetry... confusing symbolism always is at bay when the poetics are good.
Good job, made me wonder for awhile on a lot of events while reading this over and over. :)
You know when you're reading something good when it makes you wonder in different directions.

Thanks! :)

I might make a section in my diary for sonnets. I seem to write a lot of them when I'm bored.