stunnin like my daddy

[Mannequin]

In a hollow room
surrounded by mass brawl
covering my face
from the inevitable fall.

Fantasy is my forefront
for the life i cannot bare
this sadness i will now witness
but cry, i do not dare.

Twisted in quixotic ideals
only to be let down each time
but tonight i will not budge
i will finally lay down the line.

[theOperaGhost]

Good job.

[Atonement]

Very nice. Might I just make a suggestion. When writing poetry it is a lot easier to read and understand with proper punctuation and capitalization. Not trying to criticize, just a suggestion.

[The Batman]

Great Job

[superstar2067]

Nice "clap clap clap"

[Close102]

very good nice going and keep writing