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Atonement
March 7th, 2008, 04:17 AM
Mask

I wear a mask,
I wear it each day.
It covers all my feelings.
So many things I want to say.

My mask is safe,
My mask is fake.
I hide it for me,
And for your sake.

No emotions show,
No feelings reveal.
But there is something,
Something that is real.

I needed your help,
You turned away from me.
There is nothing we can do,
This I really can see.

I dont let my feelings live,
But when they do get out,
I snap and break,
I dont know what is all about.

I sitll need help,
But you are not here.
I have said this before,
You have affirmed my fear.

Sorry about this. It was short and I know it sucks. But I had a weak point. PLEEASE Comment on it.

Atonement
March 7th, 2008, 04:18 PM
dang. No one likes it enough to comment. :) lol

Sugaree
March 7th, 2008, 05:30 PM
It's actually a very good piece Addison. It seems that you took a long time with it and it paid off

japanman
March 7th, 2008, 07:30 PM
wow thats freakin awsome and man its so great *bows*

Mannequin
March 7th, 2008, 08:20 PM
eww, please come up with your own ideas. you obviously stole the whole "mask" thing. its veryyy cliche. your rhyme scheme is nice, but please dont take others ideas.

Atonement
March 7th, 2008, 08:36 PM
eww, please come up with your own ideas. you obviously stole the whole "mask" thing. its veryyy cliche. your rhyme scheme is nice, but please dont take others ideas.

Sorry, what are you even talking about?

theOperaGhost
March 7th, 2008, 08:44 PM
Very good man. You rock.

SoHumHallelujah
March 7th, 2008, 09:17 PM
That was really good ^-^

Atonement
March 8th, 2008, 12:12 AM
Thanks everyone.