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Adamant
May 22nd, 2019, 02:22 PM
I have been told I should let go of stuff I have kept bottled up for years and writing it down is easier than saying it to someone so i have written a few poems.
This is one. You probbaly need to know that on trains and at stations arouind London they have the repeated security anouncement that i have put in the poem.
Also better say that i am a lot happier than when I first had the idea for the poem which was months ago.

Abandoned

See it
Say it
Sort it

Dee Dom
Dee Dom
Dee Dom

See it
Dee Dom
Say it
Dee Dom
Sort it
Dee Dom

The rhythm of the security message
Merges with the loud rumbling of the train
And needles away, nagging at my brain.
The cosy comforting lie clashing with the
Uncomfortable truth. The exception, perhaps,
To prove the rule – it wasn’t true for me.

See it
Dee Dom
Say it
Dee Dom
Sort it
Dee Dom

A glimpse of white catches my attention.
Down the carriage there sits an abandoned
Crumpled plastic bag. Just a plain, plastic bag.
Is this what the train messages are about?
Report it; be a national hero!
But deep down I know it’s just rubbish.

There is no ticking noise. No burning smell.
But something is inside. Something special,
Maybe, like an old ladies purse or phone.
Get real! Much more likely something worthless
Like a mouldy banana skin or that
Half-eaten sandwich that no-one wants.

Nobody else cares. It must just be rubbish
So when I get off I will do nothing
Apart from wipe the tears from my eye.
Not good tears at the wrong use of plastic
Or recalling some bombing atrocity.
Just selfish -the bag seems so like me.

ska8er
May 24th, 2019, 07:53 PM
U make good analogies here
but u think little of ur worth
which is sad. Think of good
analogies of urself or life. U
can do it. I know in a way ur
venting but try to b positive.

Adamant
May 26th, 2019, 10:04 AM
U make good analogies here
but u think little of ur worth
which is sad. Think of good
analogies of urself or life. U
can do it. I know in a way ur
venting but try to b positive.

Thanks so much for bothering to comment.:)

I guess the reason why the link was obvious to me was that I was put into care "on a temporary basis" but I never went back to my mum.

I still need to work lots of things through but reckonm I am getting there.

Karalectric
May 27th, 2019, 06:03 PM
Hi Mr. Ant!

Yea my reaction was close to Andy's, but also I can see that it is raw and honest and that is sort of the point of these things right? I hope it helps in your steps to move forward. :) It really was well written and thanks for sharing.

Zika
May 27th, 2019, 08:24 PM
I'm glad to hear you're doing better than when you started this poem.
Small steps.