Song Lyric and Chord Update

[ProudThread598]

Hi! I posted one of these before and I've changed a little. Feedback would be great, thanks:
VERSE 1: D/Dsus4/D/Dsus2, C/Csus2, Em, G (cheesy 4-chord progression)


WORK IN PROGRESS, CAN'T BRAINSTORM








CHORUS

All these feelings in my heart
Make me feel
I was lost without hope
Then you arrived
I could be dead, it could be in my head but its right in front of me, its right in f

Bring me your light
Shine like a star, strong and bright
The water continues flowing
Like sand through a sift
The water is overwhelming but I am safe from the water with you



VERSE 2
I felt lost in the dark
The moon was a sliver in the sky
Then a beam of light breaks the night
I then saw it was you

I rubbed my eyes
Thinking it was a dream
Then I had a realization
It was really you

CHORUS
Bring me your light
Shine like a star, strong and bright
The water continues flowing
Like sand through your fingers

VERSE 3
I've always imagined
A star-lit crisp night
The only sound out there
Is silence

We're out in the night
Laying down in the blackout
Fingers interlocked and staring at each other
Hoping this will never end


Ideas:
Your eyes remind me of the ocean
Deep blue and powerful as the raging sea


CHORUS IDEA:
For you I'd do anything
I don't know how I can describe
How much you mean to me
Because it would take forever
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So it's definitely not perfect and it's pretty confusing but it's a starting point.

[Atlantis]

Relationships and Dating :arrow: The Open Book

Since this is something you've written, it fits better and you're more likely to get more constructive feedback here. :)

[ProudThread598]

Relationships and Dating :arrow: The Open Book

Since this is something you've written, it fits better and you're more likely to get more constructive feedback here. :)

RIP feedback :/

[crazyjazy02]

I just played it, and it's sounding really good!