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Dark Unicorn
January 12th, 2014, 04:12 PM
Her bed of nightmares floats out in space,
Laden with horror and trimmed with black lace.
Her distorted spine dances in the moonlight,
Echoes of a forgotten song ricochet in the night.

A falling star plummets before her eyes,
And in that moment strips her of her disguise.
A heart of black appears shredded in her core,
And from it thick,black ink oozes to the floor.

A delicate ribbon of thought constricts her soul,
Chaining her broken spirit,the colour of coal.
She tries to fight the demons reaching out to her,
But they choke her and make her disappear.

So she floats out in space on her bed of a nightmare,
She once had when she thought she would dare,
To flee from her horror and run to heaven's arm,
But not even angels can save her from her self-inflicted harm.

AlexOnToast
January 12th, 2014, 04:30 PM
Very deep. I actually liked it a lot. All of these posts are both making me happy to see talent, and sad at my own lack of poetic talent XD

sqishy
January 12th, 2014, 05:28 PM
Deep indeed. Wording is very good.

King_of_Hearts
January 15th, 2014, 11:30 PM
Beautiful... Very deep... hits close to home...

Loner_97
January 24th, 2014, 07:44 AM
That is really nice.Nice flow of thought.

Breakeven
January 25th, 2014, 04:25 PM
i really like it :D