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thatgothgirluknow
December 30th, 2013, 08:10 PM
hey guys i wrote some poetry sorry there so sad but thats realy the only poetry im good at i have a poetry contest coming up soon and would realy like to see what u think of my poems and witch is your favorite thanks

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what happens when you can bearly stand
when the blood you bleed is by your own hand
when you try to stand but dont think you can
when all you want to do is be a man
but even your own name brings you shame
and the demons inside you still cant tame

butterfly
if you cut the butterfly they will surely surely die
but what happens when there is no butterfly?
when the names you write are all a lie
and the ones you love will always die
when all you can do is cry
and when no matter how hard you try
you always kill the butterfly
even though you wish to see the fly
and wave them a safe goodbye
you always kill the butterfly

RavleIncarnate
December 30th, 2013, 08:15 PM
I think they are awesome, and that you have good chances at the contest. Maybe a little sad, yes, but I think they are great. May all the good graces follow you at the contest.

Emerald Dream
December 30th, 2013, 08:25 PM
Other Works :arrow: The Open Book

thatgothgirluknow
December 30th, 2013, 08:40 PM
thanks and i thought it was in the open book?

Castle of Glass
December 30th, 2013, 09:55 PM
yeeesssss. i like those poems. and i can relate :/ but they are amazing.

rianvice
December 30th, 2013, 10:03 PM
I absolutely love them...a lot. Especially the butterfly one. :D Is it weird that I don't think they're sad? But I do think they have a lot of meaning to them. Good luck in your contest...if there is a contest...and good luck with your life. I hope you won't feel so sad soon.

thatgothgirluknow
December 30th, 2013, 10:34 PM
thanks im doing a state contest that my school is forcing me into because they like the few i shared i am realy excited but i have stage fright so kinda nervous ur guys comments helped allot since ive never shared any of my sad ones before

ArtemisLianCrock
January 7th, 2014, 10:24 AM
I love them!!! You're really good.