Ayyy, read my poem

[Hazelnut]

One World (Two Hearts)


Hey beautiful brown eyes, where did you go?
(You'll never find another girl quite like me)
I'm dying here without you, don't you know?
(I hope you're crying somewhere, encompassed with misery)

I was never quite so happy, as I was with you
(You'll never be loved as much by anyone but me)
My cloudy skies became clear and blue
(Your biggest mistake was leaving, soon you'll see)

But now you're gone, and nothing can bring you back
(And that's just fine, you weren't worth my time anyway)
And sometimes I wonder what you wanted that I lack
(And sometimes I wonder why I even thought to stay)

I'm torn in two
Not knowing what went wrong
When everything felt so right

From the start
It was our two hearts
Sharing just one world.
And now it's just my one heart,
Sharing two opposite worlds

[sqishy]

Very good, bringing the emotions through well.

[Dark Unicorn]

Impressive.I like the depth without getting too deep.And like ContinuingToLive said,you really did well in bringing your emotions into it.Well done!

[Henry VIII]

Well done Hazelnut,

I was throughly impressed. You have a very distinct cadence, which I ever so fond of. Have you written any other poems?

Well done once again!

[Saint of Sinners]

That was pretty darn good! Keep it up!

[Col.Snoopy]

I don't know anything about poetry but If I did I'd think this was awesome for sure.