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Mob Boss
August 7th, 2013, 02:12 PM
Death is not an option;
living is.
But fear keeps anchoring
our timid ships.
Like the bloody needle and thread
you've used to stitch
the truth that lies behind your loose lips.
Shhh....don't let your dreams speak,
because our deaf hearts only know a steady beat,
for they've forgotten to run.
And every set of eyes have become accustomed
to the distance away from the sun.
Muscles are all that pull us along now
as if our heartstrings have been surgically cut out
and every blacktop slab of road led you back to precisely where you were found.

We no longer capture dreams alongside
fireflies
in jars
because our hands shake when we reach out too far.
We have forgotten we were once stars.


http://whatspikelikes.files.wordpress.com/2008/03/the_fountain2.jpg















I know this is pretty blergh and needs to be polished, but I just wrote this quickly to expand on a 6-word poem I wrote the other day. Also, it's extremely metaphorical, so if you don't understand it......I do not apologize. It's basically about people not actually living out of fear or...whatever it may be.

Jess
August 8th, 2013, 05:28 PM
Wow! Another beautiful poem. Keep it up :)

Gandalf
August 9th, 2013, 12:01 PM
"But fear keeps anchoring our timid ships."

Your poem is ship-shaped by the way, pardoning the pun.
That stood out, intentional or not.

Well written, well done.

Faolan
August 11th, 2013, 04:43 PM
Amazing. I love the topic and the imagery/metaphors/overall style. It's an awesome image!

Matt_97
August 12th, 2013, 03:47 PM
Its a beautiful poem. Amazing imagery and style. Keep it up :D

Lost in the Echo
August 12th, 2013, 03:52 PM
You're an amazing writer. Good job on another awesome poem. :)

Mob Boss
August 13th, 2013, 12:59 PM
Thank you so much for all the lovely comments and for taking the time to read. :D

Abyssal Echo
August 13th, 2013, 01:25 PM
I love your poems :) you're a good writer. Keep it up :D

Mob Boss
August 14th, 2013, 07:38 PM
;) Thank you.