Retention

[Origami]

I said I'd avoid writing sad things so I'm keeping this one short...


Faded out with yesterdays scars
I know that it's dead and gone,
But still the ghosts of a broken heart
Beckon me, "hold on,"

And to their will I will abide.
Though my fingers turn to white,
To bruised, to bleeding, to broken
Still they chant to continue the fight.

So in vain I grasp on to the remnants
Of a dream fading faster every day.
My chest is void and my head is full
Of malicious spirits and their persistent way.

[Mob Boss]

I really, really admire your poetry. Not simply because it's good, but because it's so good that it inspires me to want to pick up my pen. ^_^ Not just that, it's got this amazing depth and your phraseology is extremely admirable. Sad, well, more dark than sad, poetry is what I'm trying to break out of, but this inspired me to want to write something dark. The last stanza was breathtaking. :) I sincerely hope you keep on writing despite the little feedback you might receive here, because not only is it inspiring but takes me out of the world for a bit and places me in the one you've created.

[Obsidian]

I don't review things good, but this is an amazing poem and I wish I could write like you. You definitely have a talent for writing :)

[Origami]

I really, really admire your poetry. Not simply because it's good, but because it's so good that it inspires me to want to pick up my pen. ^_^ Not just that, it's got this amazing depth and your phraseology is extremely admirable. Sad, well, more dark than sad, poetry is what I'm trying to break out of, but this inspired me to want to write something dark. The last stanza was breathtaking. :) I sincerely hope you keep on writing despite the little feedback you might receive here, because not only is it inspiring but takes me out of the world for a bit and places me in the one you've created.

Thank you Bridgette, it means a lot when someone takes the time to write more than a single line in response. While this poem didn't sit well on me personally, I'm glad to hear that it further motivated someone as talented as yourself to pen a few more words. I can also relate to the urge to escape the unfathomable pit that is dark writing, but at the same time I enjoy using it to express a different view of things when I can.

Also, don't worry, I don't get put off from writing regardless of a lack of feedback. If not for other's enjoyment, I can still do it for my own. In fact, I have one now that I'm debating to post or not.

I don't review things good, but this is an amazing poem and I wish I could write like you. You definitely have a talent for writing :)

Thank you, it's appreciated.