A poem about love by me

[coreyb7]

I had to write a poem which embodied what love is to for english, so i decided to post it. Any feedback is most appreciated, and btw this is my first post, hi guys :)

Love is the strongest bond a person can have between anything,
Love is like a social outcast, often misunderstood and misinterpreted
Thought it is also the greatest source of happiness,
The one thing that we struggle to do without
We spend our lives searching for that one person,
Who simply completes us
When that person is found,
An almost surreal connection is found on every personal level,
Mentally, physically, emotionally
And though people identify and respond to these connections differently,
It is all perceived as the same thing,
Summed up in one simple word
Love is a difficult yet essential part of life,
Love is, human.

[Jessiibear]

I had to write a poem which embodied what love is to for english, so i decided to post it. Any feedback is most appreciated, and btw this is my first post, hi guys :)

Love is the strongest bond a person can have between anything, <-- You either say "with anything" or leave it at "have".
Love is Like a social outcast, love is often misunderstood and misinterpreted
Thought it is also the greatest source of happiness, it's
The one thing that we struggle to do without
We spend our lives searching for that one person, <-- You're generalizing here. :eek:
Who simply completes us.
When that person is found,
An almost surreal connection is found made on every personal level,
Mentally, physically, emotionally
And though people identify and respond to these connections differently,
It is all perceived as the same thing,
Summed up in one simple word <-- Don't think you need these two lines. Every word in a poem should count. No redundancy, no repetition, no needless additions, none of that.
Love is a difficult yet essential part of life,
Love is, (next line -->) human.

Welcome to VT! Take my suggestions with a grain of salt. :P (Psst! They're in red.) The stuff that's underlined are things I suggest you remove. I really tore through that, lol...sorry, but I don't expect you to agree with everything I've said anyway. It's just my perceptions as a writer--and I'm not the best poet. Have you considered using certain poetic devices to illustrate the message more intensely? You did a wonderful job and really conveyed the message. I especially loved that last line. Great job!

[coreyb7]

Yeah thanks for the advice, ive never really written poetry before so there's no way im going to be perfect yet :)