The Dreamless Night

[Mob Boss]

http://www.fairiesworld.com/pixs2/stars_set_heavens_alight.jpg



Goldenrod yellow eyes stared with a wide-eyed gaze
from the ominous, inky Heaven's above.
My eye's heavy-laden with
the summertide haze,
drifted off beneath the murky blanket of damp brume.
No dreams found me that night, for I had drank in all there was to offer with my eyes
against the hearty body of a willow tree,
that hummed alluvial lullabies
in harmony with the wind's delicate sighs.

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Tried something different for once. :p Just wanted to give something a little more lighthearted and bright a shot. Not sure if it worked, but it's progress at least.

[Origami]

I like this one a lot- no, I love it.

You said you were aiming for lighthearted? Yes. It doesn't give me that typical "happy" lighthearted feel that people so commonly aim for, rather, it put me at ease. It almost relaxes me with the imagery and idea of tranquil thoughts flowing through my mind to nature's rhythm. I like the idea, I like the execution.
No dreams found me that night, for I had drank in all there was to offer with my eyes
And I loved this line. Something about using the phrase "I had drank ... with my eyes" set me back at first, but became more than welcomed once I read it back over.

Very well written. You've shown everyone you can write dark pieces and with this you've shown your excellence as a writer by breaking outside of your comfort zone and nailing it!

[NeuroTiger]

It's a nice one and the pic just makes it better.

[ImCoolBeans]

Your use of imagery is fantastic, Bridge. Your punctuation is tasteful and you change it up between pieces. In another piece of yours I saw you use a dash, and in another a semicolon. You use all of your punctuation correctly and effectively to give each piece a nice, unique flow. I love it.

Like Josh said, you've shown everybody your darker writings and now you've gone out of your comfort zone and shown that you can in fact branch out and write more delicate poems.

Never stop writing.

[dontfiguremeout]

I really enjoy this piece a lot! It took me to a whole new fun fantasy world that I want to go to! I really love your imagery... a lot!!

[isiah_]

That was great! Truly amazed!

[Mob Boss]

AWw, :) Thank you so much, guys, for all the lovely comments. Literally just made my day. :)

[OrKing]

I'm extremely happy to see your still writing B! I've loved everything I've read of yours so far and this one was no different. You should definitely keep writing. Like forever, please.

[Mob Boss]

I'm extremely happy to see your still writing B! I've loved everything I've read of yours so far and this one was no different. You should definitely keep writing. Like forever, please.

xD AWWW, thanks!! I will.

[Miserabilia]

once again great poem and great picture with it

[Mob Boss]

thanks so much, cheese head

[jayjay's toocool]

This is beautiful and the picture gives it another dreamy theme

[Emerald Dream]

I always love your poetry, Bridge :) even when you do something different it's great