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jayyy-lmao
March 22nd, 2013, 06:26 PM
I started writing this short story, and I've written about five short chapters. I would LOVE to hear what any of you think, and ways I could improve. (If you take the time to read, it'll be worth it.)

EDIT: I finished the story, and I put it on Movellas, so I'm putting the link to it here. http://www.movellas.com/en/book/read/201303232120135849
Youmadbro
March 22nd, 2013, 07:59 PM
Hi!
This story is great so far. Good formating, good character display. All I recommend, since it's such a young story, is eliminate the words in all caps. Instead use italics or bold.
That's all though! :D Great work!
jayyy-lmao
March 23rd, 2013, 05:36 AM
Hi!
This story is great so far. Good formating, good character display. All I recommend, since it's such a young story, is eliminate the words in all caps. Instead use italics or bold.
That's all though! :D Great work!

I would use italics or bold, but I'm using my iPad to type, and the app doesn't have italics or bold.
Youmadbro
March 23rd, 2013, 05:44 PM
I would use italics or bold, but I'm using my iPad to type, and the app doesn't have italics or bold.

Ah I understand. I use a phone. Nevermind, haha!
The Awkward Artist
March 23rd, 2013, 08:11 PM
Wow, what a great little story! I loved reading it! It was really cute! Amazing job!! :)
jayyy-lmao
March 24th, 2013, 06:17 AM
Wow, what a great little story! I loved reading it! It was really cute! Amazing job!! :)

Thanks! I really enjoy writing it, I got a lot of inspiration from things that have happen in my school and my life. :)
Jess
March 24th, 2013, 10:58 PM
Great story so far! :)