girl with dark hair

[Anonymous]

I see you standing there with that glimpse in your eye.
You know you got me hypnotized.
With your hair put neatly on your face.
Your beauty captures the radiance of the sun.
The nice complexion witht he stunning body.
Its all great, but when your beauty captures thye radiance of the sun.


*edited last line.

[WakeUp]

i liked it, until the last line, which is a bit of a contrast to the rest of it.
But yno what, at least there was a load of happiness in there, and its put together perfect. good job :D:D

Are you feeling happy today then?

[LoSt_n_the_WoRlD]

i agree...it flows really well and i like it alot but the last line...was kind of not sposed to be there in my oppinion