as the world stoped and stared

[i_love_jesus]

what did you do that dreadfull day
that hijakers crashed into new york
did you cry or did you pray what
on earth made you do what you did
did you stay home in front of your loved ones
did you start to fell amotions that you neaver thought
you could no and it alll happend sep 11

[TMTY]

good job but u should add more to it

[i_love_jesus]

okay thanks

[TMTY]

no prob

[i_love_jesus]

ya

[Elokyn]

its good, but the last line sorta makes it sound like an advertisment for a movie or something...I'd x that and try a different line there good job though keep it up

[i_love_jesus]

ok

[the_hope_house]

good job

[i_love_jesus]

thanks